Bottom Of The Bottle

I wrote this for Poetry and Lyrical Challenge group.

One shot quickly becomes two.
Hoping to rid myself of you.
Two turns quickly into three.

Down the hatch goes number four,
Burning like it hasn't before.
Eyes blurred from the fire water.

As the whiskey now disappears,
In my mind, memories of you reappear.
Seething heartache does return.

Whiskey whisks me into a deep sleep.
Where dreams of you silently creep.
Is there no where to escape you?

Author's Note

I did this once after i left someone whom I deeply loved and still love. I woke up in the morning after dreaming about him all night and decided never to do that again one I only thought about him more and two I couldn't escape it for he was there in my dreams. I now just deal with the emotions.

Reviews

[R E Tree]

I do say it is very much like a song I could sing this all day in my head. Some parts of this poem does sound a bit unclear and thats just the first stanza. But by thinking deeply I can just imagine you being at the bottom of a bottle. I would be scared to be trapped in a botte and I would scream for freedom but you don't as you are very brave.

[The Water Queen]

Any alcohol is the short time cure. WE think it will take away the thoughts we dont want and it does. But only for one night and maybe not even then. This poem is great. It flows very easily and the imagery is stunningly great.

"Fire water causes a deep sleep.
Where dreams of you slowly creep.
Is there no where to escape you?"

This is my favorite stanza out of the whole poem. I love the way you compare whiskey to fire water. Perfect.

[Coyote Poetry]

Whiskey is a short time cure. But sometime a better alternative to trying to change things that can not. I know this poem. Been there a few times. In the morning you pay for the bad deeds of the night before. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[StacyPerry]

Odd how this poem ended up here at the moment and then I wrote todays work. I think this one was a real good write.

[Ruth]

"Fire water "............great imagery!
This is intense, powerfully written, I like it a lot:)
That total immersion in the bottle, a scary and yet liberating thing to people, wonderful poem
xx

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

great rhyming and flow and speaks vividly of the tragedies of those who use alcohol to deal with pain.

[The Analog Kid]

I like the theme of using whiskey as an escape with the irony:)

Welcome back!

[Ice QueenJen]

Oh this has me thinking of my own tragic life, although I don't drink its still there. The thoughts of the one you love, or used to love, or even hate- nothing seems to help you forget what has entered the mind. Great poem Poetic!