Sapphire Dreams

Written for one of my groups.

Sapphire dreams, elude me,
Leaving sleep only dark, empty.
Pictures black encased in mist.

Vivid color has faded now.
Wondering the whens and hows,
Dreaming became clouded, dark

Your face wrapped in fog,
Hidden in a swampy bog.
Shrouding present time and space.

Magical scent fill the black air,
Reaching outward with love and care.
Your pheromones speak to me.

Knowing it's you, by the scent,
Heart beats rapidly, anxiety spent.
Feeling in the dark, your figure's there.
 

Reviews

[The Perfectionist]

Fog and bog rhyme funny. Don't know why, but that just reads weird. Anyway.

It's a short poem with a short, but complete, story arc, and in that sense it's very strong. Some of your wording is strange, and feels like you forced it in so it would rhyme, but it never stands out to any significant degree. I liked it.

[Jennifer Pennington]

This was a very well done piece of work.

[HorrorMaster]

Very nice poem

[Mauricio Montoya]

you're back in the grove, great job well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel and flow of words. You took me with you to many places. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Shalini Dinesh]

very lovely love poem , the rhymes are good and not forced. Well done :)

[StacyPerry]

I truly enjoyed this piece.

[R E Tree]

This is touching and heart felt. I can see beautiful imagery in this, everything was described so sweetly. It's not too deep or complicated it's just perfect.

[Cheryl J. Turner]

Beautiful with an sense of magic and mystery.

[DBURKE]

This is a really good poem. I love the imagery, the flow, and the emotional depth of this piece! Nice work