Winding Road

A poem written for Poetry and Lyrical challenge group. Title Winding Road. Topic dark winding road.

The darkness looms on ahead
A curving road with dust
Now slowing down the gust

For thinking is now clouded
With memories of the past
The loving did not last

A blackness does invade
As gravel bumps under tires
Love a heart's desires

Spinning out of control
The breaking glass in shards
Car left broken and marred

Gleaming headlights shine brightly
Now showing the distant way
but refusing, the heart stays

Shrouded in a numb aching
With sadness it does sink
Brain declining to think

Darkened love causes the crash
Heart completely broke and lost
Feet frozen in place like frost

Listless and utterly numb
Life begins to move on
With passion never gone

Leaving the winding road
Car abandoned there
Mind moving forward with care

Life will never be the same
His face deeply engraved
Soft warming touch always craved.

Reviews

[Manda]

wow! awesome

[Constance-Outspoken]

This is one of your best poems, in my opinion. It is open and emotive, yet has balance and flow in its form and rhyme. :) Bravo!

[Bette]

this is very sad, but well done

[Sam Severn]

This reads like a road tragedy n' ends with a sweet touch of grace....I love the lines "A blackness does invade/As gravel bumps under tires/Love a heart's desires"....
Beautiful stuff! ㋡

[Crowley]

Life altering events....you never really know whats going to come out of a situation. Good description of the pain, confusion and ultimate road to recovery. Flow was very good and the writing was also solid. Nice write.

[Sean M. Addams]

very cool piece ... i thought you did well on this and love the detail that you have put into this.. nice job!!

[Jenny Nelson]

Lots of emotion well conveyed here. Great description and the piece flows really well. It was very touching. Very nice piece here.

[deeps]

This is quite the write here, Flows wonderful.
I enjoyed reading this. It's moving

[StacyPerry]

R.I.P. -Peter Steele [Petrus T. Ratajczyk] "Love you to Death" and hope you have found peace.

This piece moved me and the above is for our friends out there and fans of Petrus.

[Shalini Dinesh]

emotional writing, good choice of words, well framed... good work