Emerald Sea

Written for Poetry and Lyrical challenge group. The title was Emerald Sea and the topic was a tree.

Drifting away;
On an emerald sea.
Lost in tranquility.

Where the tree branches;
Glide and gently sway,
As clouds flutter away.

A peaceful time,
With glistening rays.
The sun trickles and plays.

Through the green leaves;
To my relaxed calm face.
No love to thirstily chase.

Yearning is quiet,
As the gradual breeze blows,
With a slight stillness that shows.

Mind calm at last
The oak temperately dances
As the sunset now advances

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

Nice use of the words. I like it a lot. First stanza is superb:)

[just rose.]

My favorite stanzas are the first and the last, where the meter flows particularly well. Very relaxing.

[Manda]

oh this was nice. well done

[Constance-Outspoken]

The fourth stanza bothers me... for some reason as I read I want to see calm, relaxed rather than relaxed calm with no pause. Other than that, the poem flows nicely and gives a feeling of rest and reflection. Quite pretty. :) I like it very much.

[Bette]

this was relaxing! well done p/b

[untoldtruth]

your poem is great. the words blend together and flow

[Crowley]

I felt like taking a nap after that one I was so relaxed. Nice picture you painted her, and the emerald green font a nice touch. Good write girl.

[darem aq.]

very descriptive, soothing and serene ! wonderful write !

[Jenny Nelson]

It is indeed a very calming and peaceful write. Very picturesque. Enjoyed this much.

[Shalini Dinesh]

a serene poem, beautifully written and so peaceful to read, i liked it