Emerald Sea

Written for Poetry and Lyrical challenge group. The title was Emerald Sea and the topic was a tree.

Drifting away;
On an emerald sea.
Lost in tranquility.

Where the tree branches;
Glide and gently sway,
As clouds flutter away.

A peaceful time,
With glistening rays.
The sun trickles and plays.

Through the green leaves;
To my relaxed calm face.
No love to thirstily chase.

Yearning is quiet,
As the gradual breeze blows,
With a slight stillness that shows.

Mind calm at last
The oak temperately dances
As the sunset now advances

Reviews

[The Water Queen]

I love your flow and your rhyme. Great poem. Relaxing and lovely read.

[alesuriko]

Good poem, it's flow and rhythm is nice and the ideas behind the poem are good. In essence it is a well written piece, very soothing and natural. But I can't help but notice that several of your poems lately seem to be reproductions of the same thing. Not saying this to offend you, it simply seems that some of your poems are the same thing said in a slightly different way or tone.

But it is a really nice poem. I liked the personification with "The oak temperately dances". Well done.

[Frifthor (D^2)]

A good piece, one which reminds me a bit of one I reviewed earlier. Like the rhymes, and the poem speaks about a peaceful place. Sorry to be so brief, but a good write.

[S.W.]

You really have made this poem flow and really is beautiful to read.

[Abhinav]

a very neat poem, and it was very soothing to read
loved it:)

[Astoria Eve]

I really loved your rhyming and especially loved the line "No Love to thirstily chase". I think that maybe you could work on your comma use because it doesn't really flow as nicely as it should. If you're like me, you write as if it should be read aloud, but then no one knows how to read it.
But i think that the lyric theme and the rhyming is very nice.

[Dillon Cotter]

"As the sunset now advances" truly amazing. Also your title is gorgeous and it grabbed my attention rapidly. Great job!

-Will

[Zapster]

Good job in describing the environment around you. Good job in communication.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The great flow and rhyming add to the charm of this magical piece... this feels like a place you would close your eyes and imagine when you need to get away from real life for a moment.