Wounds

The wounds have healed.
The feeling of love is sealed;
However these scars run deep
And my eyes are about to weep.

Time has slowly passed us by,
is it possible for another try?
When you in the shadow, time freezes...
but the longing never eases.

Flashes of days that have came and passed,
wishing our love could have lasted.
No one is left to blame, but me;
'cause of my childish insecurities.

Will this burning passion ever leave?
Why can't I get a reprieve?
I'm praying with a faithful heart
and I'm wanting a whole new start.

I'm wishing for your hand to hold on
instead of me feeling lonely and cold.
Wounds open fresh and new...
so now what am I suppose to do?

Loving words make it start again.
How do we become only friends?
The hole in my heart is here.
I need your love, your sweet care.

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

I find the rhymes to be a bit forced, but the overall emotionalism is very complex shedding its fragrance in colors of loneliness, pain, regret, and need. The title best describes the shedding of this poem from your mind, to your fingertips, to paper, and to the eyes of the reader. Thank you. Grammatically though, there is a few places that you could work on: if you wish for me to critique it grammatically, give me a message.

Mechanically, it's a very well written poem conveying definitively what you are trying to convey. And I love especially towards the end of this poem as my favorite. Thank you for your life, for you for simply living and not giving up is an encouragement to me. Thank you. 9.4/10.

As a friend and a writer,
S. W. Scaggs

[Sean M. Addams]

a very cool piece..liked the rhyme and flow of this alot... overall i thought you did great on this..nice job!!!

[HorrorMaster]

Wow lovely. I love this one

[Bette]

well done P/b