Glimpse Of Love

An old one revamped

With the grace of a predatory hawk

She sauntered across the massive room

Rolling her eyes making small talk

While inside her heart was in passion’s bloom

 

With her target in her focused sights

She rapidly breeched the growing crowd

Figure illuminated by patio lights

Another stopped her, his voice too loud

 

Pretending to listen she nodded her head

She gazed to the alluring figure outside

Wishing her tongue wasn’t full of lead

I have to go she fibbed and lied

 

Almost running to the patio’s threshold

She focused no longer looking back

Her lover, she needed to intensely hold

The coveted destination was right on track

 

A laden hand she placed on his shoulder

As a wisp of cool air was gently blowing

She need his warmth, for him to hold her

Gone, his form faded, sadness now showing

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

This type of glimpses of love will drive some one insane. I wonder was he just in her imagination, a ghost perhaps or just wishful thinking. To come so close and then come up empty is a hard pill to swallow. Your poetic form is always good, your flow is always great. Another great one by you.

[Lost, n'MT]

You really are an amazing write and it seems like piece after piece is as good as the one prior. Over a thousand poems is a lot but I look forward to reading every single one of them. This poem in particular is another powerful one that really stands out. Whether female or male, I feel either sex can relate to it so very much. After reading this, it reminded me of my piece, "Speak Up" and how I can relate so very well. Such a emotionally yet wonderful write. Thank you once again.

[The Analog Kid]

I like the way it was like a short short in a poem:). I dig the last stanza. ...Wind blowing...good symbolism....Also, nice phrasing on the last satnza!

[Jenny Nelson]

Great write! Flows really well. Emotion definitely comes through. I really love that last stanza... the lost chance, the chance not taken. Very sad.

[Abhinav]

Loved it.....it was really touching,and heartfelt......agree with Meredith Greene though,just that last bit....

[Belator Books]

A piece well-spaced, that flows along at an even keel.

My only nit is the last line of the first stanza:

"That last too long, never ending soon";

The word 'last' should be lasted' if is it to match the rest of the piece's past tense. Cheers.

[Emily B]

this is a lovely write

thanks for sharing it

[Subjective Sanity]

Makes my heart thump, thump, thump...

[Dana Kathryn]

This is very good! I really felt this one strongly,:)

[MissWordSmith]

wow that was like telling a chapter of a book in a poem. loved it.

[Jeff Miller]

Great imagery and rhyme scheme! Keep up the good work!