Glimpse Of Love

An old one revamped

With the grace of a predatory hawk

She sauntered across the massive room

Rolling her eyes making small talk

While inside her heart was in passion’s bloom

 

With her target in her focused sights

She rapidly breeched the growing crowd

Figure illuminated by patio lights

Another stopped her, his voice too loud

 

Pretending to listen she nodded her head

She gazed to the alluring figure outside

Wishing her tongue wasn’t full of lead

I have to go she fibbed and lied

 

Almost running to the patio’s threshold

She focused no longer looking back

Her lover, she needed to intensely hold

The coveted destination was right on track

 

A laden hand she placed on his shoulder

As a wisp of cool air was gently blowing

She need his warmth, for him to hold her

Gone, his form faded, sadness now showing

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

This type of glimpses of love will drive some one insane. I wonder was he just in her imagination, a ghost perhaps or just wishful thinking. To come so close and then come up empty is a hard pill to swallow. Your poetic form is always good, your flow is always great. Another great one by you.

[Robin]

haunting , an apparition , so close , so real - shattered by reality

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was so great! I found myself trying to hurry her across the room! but went she finally got there I was sad right along with her, he was gone!

[InkSlinger]

Enjoyable flow.. I love the twisting of words.. always have..
Sometimes we lend our ear to those who need it most.. often finding we have sacrificed our own needs in passed opportunities..

[Wondering Mind]

opportunity knocks once and then dissolves in Time.

[Katie Louise Hughes]

This was a wonderfully written and articulate poem. The sadness comes through in this poem, and the ending was good. "All she wanted was his warmth, for him to hold her
Then gone, his form faded, sadness now bestowing"
Thanks for the request!! :D

[Ladysue]

The title is fitting and oh that ending was very well done. I could feel the emotion the build up and the sadness. very well done...

[Ruth]

The ending to this hon is shattering! The emotions quiver with sadness! Excellent poem, love portrayed in an elegant manner that leaves the reader thinking and moved!
xx

[ICE]

It is a very sad thing when we finally get the courage to do something but then the opportunity has past and is gone. Great write!

~Ice

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Grasping at something you want but can't have... wanting to breath that person in so they are your life... intense and gripping.... I am left with jaw hanging wide open.