Bruised

The soft gentle hand
Became too harsh and boastful
A silent harshness in the man
Made life become unhopeful

It struck without warning
Leaving a union shattered and broken
The heart is angry and in morning
Bruises the only lingering token

The nights are quiet and long
The days are filled with emotion
Everything that happened was wrong
Change came quickly with the commotion

Walking away without looking back
Standing tall in the face of trouble
Life and heart now on a different track
Then the pain caused bruises and the hurt doubled


In a few short moments rapture was shattered
Piece never to put back together or fixed
Because anger decided to abuse, the woman got battered
Now the emotions are strange and tormentingly mixed.

Author's Note

This a raw poem that I haven't refined yet. Please let me know if there is changes that need to be made. This poems is still hard for me to read. I wrote this poem days after I was abused by my now ex boyfriend. Thanks to my "Charming" I got threw every moment of it and even the court situation.

Reviews

[Millionth Muse]

I think that this is an absolutely worth topic, and I commend you for your strength. My suggestions would really center around detail...I think there's more that you can do with this in terms of getting to the "heart of the matter". I would suggest maybe trying something in free verse without the rhyme, because in this situation I think it's constricting you a little. Once you've done that, maybe you could rework it back into a rhymed verse if you absolutely wanted to, but I think that there is just more that you can say here, and it's important that you can say it!

[Neville]

There is no need to refine this .. but I expect you will in time as you move forward and recover and grow .. even more so than you have already moved forward, recovered and grown in the last ten years or more ..

[Poetic Beauty]

This is 11 years ago and I have not refined it and most likely will not.

[Tina Kline]

Powerful words for a terrible situation to have to be trapped in. One of the more painful situations to have to suffer, having someone who claims to love you turn on you physically and emotionally. I'm glad you survived it and have a chance to heal.