Cosmic Strings

A single midnight blue ribbon
Is wrapped around purple twine
A pattern woven together
Of Universal cosmic strings
That are invisible to the eyes

They float effortlessly in waves
As they design intricate knots
Held, combined with divine knowledge
From the Creator of all life forces

Precise intersection of beings
A perfect timing in nature
To heal, one, along the journey
And guide with spiritual wisdom

Delicate markings, yet firmly hold
Their exact shape as they collide
A Force that isn’t clearly seen
Has a perfect plan for this path

Event in life that’s unexpected
His purpose not yet been revealed
Even this his ribbon is tightly knotted
To this complex violet thread

Mystery yet to be unraveled
As they merge in this moment of time
Forever leaving small fibers behind
Lessons and gifts given to each other.

Reviews

[Poetic_Vixen]

This poem, as I read, is saturated with effervescence of romance, with the lover's tied with ethereal divine blue lace, I love how it binds spiritually, making it a bond destined by time, unable to be broken away easily. Your poem often has exceptionally beautiful descriptions of romance and passion, it's always a treat to read!

[Poetic Beauty]

I’m glad you think so. This one took some work mentally and creatively to get the idea out. It is romance and unexpected chance meeting. Also i truly believe their is a reason we a brought certain people into our lives gift or lesson sometimes both.

[Poetic_Vixen]

When they are both a lesson and gift, it is sort of a bittersweet blessing worth keeping to the ends of time. I love this idea of your poem.

[Poetic Beauty]

Sometimes lessons are cruel. Sometimes they are meant to show us the beauty we hold from another person’s eyes. Give back our self confidence and passion for life in general

[Poetic Beauty]

Are not cruel

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! What a review from DGD; a,slap in the face.
Best wishes answering him.

[Poetic Beauty]

I did answer him and I have thick skin. You can read my reply. Shrug I don’t really care. My work and words stand for themselves. I know my flaws especially with flow it’s never completely smooth, sometimes my wording gets wonky and oh the typos. I use to harsher criticism and I know my spicy poems aren’t for everyone lol

[Sami Khalil]

I will and I'm proud of you. You go poet.

[Poetic Beauty]

He’s just angry. There were some words that were said in a post that didn’t sit well with me either regardless of him being an asshat. I simply didn’t engage in the commotion

[Sami Khalil]

I saw that; it triggered his anger.
Best wishes with people like that.

[Poetic Beauty]

I’m an Aquarius and I see all side of the spectrum. I understand everyone being angry about his words and be pitting people but sometimes things can be taken too far. Yes he has a superiority complex and is bulling but there are ways of handling it without completely tearing his life apart in the process. Anyway rant over. His angry doesn’t affect me in the slightest

[Sami Khalil]

Good to know. You know how to handle those types.

[Poetic Beauty]

He’s degrading my work not my character or intelligence.

[Sami Khalil]

I love that perspective and self confidence

[Sami Khalil]

I saw where he called another poet old and fossilized; that was rude and mean.

[Poetic Beauty]

It is rude and mean. I try not to be that way but let me tell you if he criticized my character or my intelligence it would be handle in a different manner completely

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo. I don't doubt it.

[Yana Larson]

This poem is a thoughtful and intricate meditation on connection, destiny, and the unseen forces that bind lives together. The imagery of cosmic strings and woven ribbons creates a sense of interconnectedness, as if each thread represents an individual journey tied to a larger spiritual tapestry. Lines like *“Precise intersection of beings / A perfect timing in nature”* evoke a feeling of serendipity and divine orchestration, suggesting that each encounter is purposeful and transformative.

The style is reminiscent of the mystical, introspective qualities found in the works of Rainer Maria Rilke and Kahlil Gibran, poets who also explore the themes of spiritual purpose and human connection. The poem’s language and structure lend it a contemplative, almost sacred tone, capturing the mystery and complexity of life’s bonds. Overall, it’s a beautifully crafted reflection on fate, weaving together imagery and metaphor to express the enduring impact of relationships.

[Tatenda Chivhondo]

This is impeccable and l love your writing style.

[John Sullivan]

Hoo-boy, you said a bunch. I'm still trying to wrap my head around this one... always a pleasure to see a poet tackle the big questions. I'll try to leave a more thoughtful review later, cheers

[Poetic Beauty]

It’s the thought that the Divine Creator aka God has people intersect our lives at precise times for lesson or gifts or both.

[John Sullivan]

No stranger to that sort of pondering. Very nicely done

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. It is a deeper thinking poem.

[Neville]

I would love to think you have insights into things I often think about on my journey and searching for enlightenment .. if you did, then I feel sure that I would be among your disciples .. a compelling post and very muchly enjoyed ma'am .. Neville

[Poetic Beauty]

I have a really complex believe but here is it summed up. So I believe in God and Jesus. I think of God more like people think of the Universe. I believe He is an energy being around us all the time. I do believe he can take human form. I do believe in heave as well. I think God the Divine Creator has use meet people at precise moments for reasons we may not understand. That brings in the cosmic strings

[Neville]

I hold no man above man and lean toward no spiritual figurehead .. but nevertheless respect the beliefs and values of all .. Neville

[Poetic Beauty]

I find others beliefs interesting.

[Neville]

................ me too

[Tom]

Poetic, prothetic, poetry at its metaphoric best here, we often overlook the small print even tho this is the foundation of life and even the very great cosmos itself, ignore at you peril I say!!

Marvellous, cerebral in thought and word at a deep and profound level poet friend!!

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. This one was more difficult to write and it needs. Little fine tuning but there was a poem that I was working on that screamed
For attention last night.

[Amy R]

This poem is based on the interconnectedness of all beings in the universe and the unseen forces that guide and influence our lives. Which is very TRUE...

I enjoyed this poem, "cosmic strings." Something I will definitely enjoy writing about to.
My fav stanza is the last one, it sums up everything so beautifully. 🤍🤍

-Amy

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for your kind words. I love the idea of the Divine Creator guiding us together at certain moments for different reasons.

I need to go back and tweak this poem a little bit I wanted to get the idea on paper. I always refine from here once posted.

[Amy R]

You're very welcome :)
Me to I love that same idea especially when inspires me most times..

[Davidgeo]

Oh I love FAKE friends... here, have a review FAKE friend....
I think chatGPT could of done better, most of our work is derivative. AI is a better writer than all of us. I know we think we have something unique to offer but, we don't. Do you really think out of everyone, you're the one? Ha.... yes I would like fries with that.

Enjoy the words. Avoid insight though... oh man that s**t is brutal... do your best to try and Never figure this out. It's a lot worse than you think. But for real... in the spirti of Gay J... I have to say.. your writing is derivative and I'm pretty sure I could teach a chronically intoxicated monkey to put out better quality. Thanks! And f**k you.

[Poetic Beauty]

Your words don’t bother me any. Say all you want to say. I have had an actual perfectionist help me get my work evolved and he would line by line tear it apart and with real flaws on display for everyone to see.

Not sure why you involved me in this in the first place. I didn’t know who people were talking about until later. Guess you can’t take your own criticism.

[Davidgeo]

I think your work is fine. But I think you are a part of an online bullying campaign and people who participate in stuff like, to me, are lacking in character. People like that are why the suicide rate in America is so high. Good job... well done.

[Poetic Beauty]

I did not personally attack you!! I have not criticized your character other than chasing people away by rude comments isn’t necessary and I do believe you think you are superior to others. I have not degraded your life nor your experiences so don’t put that on me!! I haven’t even looked into your life.

And I will have you know I am a damn good person and deserve respect. You know nothing about me. I am kind until you push me too far. I know my own self worth and you are free to think what ever you choose. Not everyone is going to like me. If you’d look at a reply above I had flat out said people in the post too it way too far to tear you life part instead of just telling the thing you did they didn’t like.

So with that i politely am telling you I don’t f*****g care what you think. Do some fact checking before you attack me again.

[Davidgeo]

You're right. There's no excuse for my behavior on this site yesterday, I was totally out of my mind, inexcusable behavior. I apologize and I will make sure to control myself in the future, you will not have to worry about something like this again.

[Poetic Beauty]

Apology accepted. I do truly hope you have a better day today and your mental state is on a better place. You apologizing shows true real character and I thank you for that!

[Davidgeo]

Thank you for accepting my apology. I wouldn't call this character but, if I continue to over time take responsibility and control how I react to things in a functional way... maybe one day. Thanks again, and I won't bother you with this non sense again.

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome

[Sami Khalil]

Peace, love and harmony

[Ken Simm.]

Delicate and yet strong. This is silk, gossamer and gold. I love it.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for your incredibly kind words Ken. It means a lot. I do need to go back and do a little tweaking on this one but I wanted to get it out on paper and on here. I tweak my poems on here and not in the original hen scratch in my journals lol

[Thomas W Case]

Fantastic work on this cosmic dance of life. You paint this picture very well.

[Poetic Beauty]

I’m sure there is a purpose and a reason why we meet each person at exact moments in our lives.

[andrew mitchell]

Maybe fate relies on these cosmic strings bringing people together. Nice write PB

[Poetic Beauty]

Maybe it does