Mind Wanders

Sometime my mind wanders through wastelands
Of barren loves left unattained
And heated sand that blisters
Leaving tiny scars upon the heart
Small intricate patterns of art

Shortness my mind wander through swamps
Of yesterdays trials resolved
Yet murky waters cloud my vision
Blocking what’s already been cleared
Wispy fog floating with what’s feared

Sometimes my mind wanders through oceans
Deep po swimming sadness unrealistic
As tidal waves of emotions crash
As the weight feels heavy inside
Until there it a shift in the tide

Sometimes my my wanders through the sky
Of moonless grasping of things not seen
Clouds that whisper splendid faerytales
Lies that leave destruction in its wake
Harsh words that bluster are only fake

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

My mind wanders too and not always to beautiful places and pósitive thoughts. This poem appears to be focusing on the negative. Barren loves and sand that blisters are strong images that do little for a soft heart. Your stanzas are always composed with careful thought. You write so well PB.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. Yes my mind will try to focus on negatives if I let it so I’m slowly making it shift to more positive thoughts. It takes time.

The imagery and idea for each stanza is thought about and I go line by line and stanza by stanza. Sometimes I do free flow poems. Many times even if my poems rhyme they don’t have a precise flow.

[Yana Larson]

This poem skillfully captures the inner landscapes of a wandering mind, using imagery of wastelands, swamps, oceans, and skies to represent different emotional states and struggles. The transitions through each setting mirror the complexities of unresolved love, past trials, and the weight of sadness, creating a tapestry of raw, introspective experience. Lines like *“Shortness my mind wander through swamps / Of yesterday’s trials resolved”* evoke a sense of moving through shadows of the past, while *“Clouds that whisper splendid faerytales / Lies that leave destruction in its wake”* suggest the allure and peril of illusions.

The style echoes the introspective, reflective qualities of Sylvia Plath and Mary Oliver, both of whom explore complex emotions through natural metaphors. The poem’s fragmented, shifting stanzas reinforce the sense of a mind navigating through different emotional terrains, adding a haunting beauty to the piece. Overall, it’s a poignant, evocative reflection on the journeys within the mind, offering a glimpse into the beauty and difficulty of self-reflection.

[Poetic Beauty]

Our brains like to gravitate to negative instead of positive and we have to retrain our thinking and our brains to acknowledge those memories and emotions but let them go and gloat away with the wind.

[Poetic Beauty]

And float away

[Yana Larson]

Yes, you're right, negativity is easier to take. But that doesn't mean it's the only way. You need to fight for goodness not only in the world, but also in your own heart, first and foremost. Because it is easy to see the bad in others, but it is so hard to see it in yourself and have the courage to turn it into good.

[nadia dmitri]

Very well crafted stanzas, such vibrant descriptions, you can feel the connection through the page

[Poetic Beauty]

I’m glad you could feel the connection through the pages. Thank you for reading !!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like the construction of this....and the four sectors it covers...

I would have liked it even more with just the first stanza as the entire poem...

Those five lines could stand on their own.

nicely done.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for the compliment

[Writergurl (Mama's Girl..]

Such a relatable write here, nicely written

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have those moments when our mind wants to be negative and tell us false information lol

[Masked writer]

I love this, very poetic, very relatable, very real.

[Poetic Beauty]

Yes it definitely 👍 s

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Magnificent work. In this day and she where technology moves like the speed of light it is hard to not reminds move at that speed to.

[Poetic Beauty]

Trying to slow the brain and life down can be quite the challenge and making it shut down

[Re-Pete]

doesn't sound like very nice places to be wandering. i like how you used powerful elements of nature to describe the "places"/feelings where her mind wandered. we all need to be careful of what comes out of our mouths. sometimes we need to find a new path.

[Poetic Beauty]

My brain likes to focus on negative even if there isn’t really one. I’ve been working on focusing my thoughts on more positive thoughts instead

[Re-Pete]

me too. i hear ya'.

[Anita Frader]

An evocative write, PB. Strong images.

[Poetic Beauty]

I like to add strong visuals to help the reader

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work. You take the reader right into the scene.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. I like to add a lot visual aspect to my poetry