If it wasn't for the optimism of the next one being right and working out, we'd all just stay in bed and not bother at all. Just think of all that grief we'd save and we wouldn't have to sit through another date wishing we were back in bed (we'll, it'd still be a good result either way) 😊
If only that darned mind jukebox would calm down playing all our greatest hits and misses though, like we need reminding 😊
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3 Years Ago
This is very true. In my case I am still friends with this person. We have not lived in the same sta.. read moreThis is very true. In my case I am still friends with this person. We have not lived in the same state as each other for 10 years now. He is my best friend and I can tell him anything. It’s a long on going story. But sometimes I have to s**t my brain off from the repeat memories
The irony here putting such thoughts together about being unable to put thoughts together. Excellent.
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3 Years Ago
Or rather trying to switch though guys only for it to spin to the same thought only different tense .. read moreOr rather trying to switch though guys only for it to spin to the same thought only different tense lol
I have to admit, I like V1 & V2 better, where this narrator is spinning around in his/her mind. Then the storyline is taken over by this missing person the narrator pines for. I read so many poems at the cafe where a narrator is pining over a missing person, I felt a little let-down by this predictable outcome. I wanted the spinning mind to go someplace different, someplace imaginative. You word everything with high imagination, but the overall journey itself is too mundane for me (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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3 Years Ago
Well that is what my muse was calling for. It is a deeply felt feeling.
Skipping, Gliding across, Playing, the broken record...
from Vinyl to CD's a gap from past to future...a transition.
I like the metaphor here, "it's the same old song" as the Four Tops sang.
I have had long distance relationships...the missing is repeated like a record skipping...the same old sadness, the same old loneliness.
but at least on a screen these days, we are able to see each other...but the touch can only be imagined.
excellent write.
j.
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We haven’t lived in the same city or same state in a decade. We aren’t together but we care abou.. read moreWe haven’t lived in the same city or same state in a decade. We aren’t together but we care about each other on unconditional terms. We live our lives and remain friends
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I know he is my other half and I miss him greatly. We keep it on friend terms when one of us is in a.. read moreI know he is my other half and I miss him greatly. We keep it on friend terms when one of us is in a relationship and that is the case at the moment.
"Memories of you are the scripts"... Yes when we eat, drink and do everything with a vast palpable memory lingering in our hearts, then the whole life becomes a script in front of our eyes! I can feel the urge and the rapid changing of emotions here... Your poem depicts the true passion in this
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3 Years Ago
You are correct there is so many emotions poured into this piece.
The mind wanders all the time, pausing on memories of people places, etc, but it seems that you are focusing on an person, who seems to be out of reach physically and emotionally, the pause moves to a flurry of. New visions “ only to repeat the same song”. The
Nicely written, liked it a lot.
Best
Betty
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3 Years Ago
My mind repeats many things over over again but mostly the person who understands me more than anyon.. read moreMy mind repeats many things over over again but mostly the person who understands me more than anyone in this world besides my son
3 Years Ago
I like your answer, it makes sense, I feel the same way! Best, Betty
It looks good to me.
I like the, seemingly so, brevity of the lines.
It is a great title " Restless Repeating "
This, in it self should stop the idle rummager, give him pause for thought to start a reading of it.
Personally I'm not a great fan of " inversions , as in the placing of the word " does " but, I think you've placed it perfectly as in " A wounded heart does beseech "
because, I guess a " wounded heart " would "beseech. "
The whole piece shows that the author has a deep understanding of the language employed both poetical and, the author's mother tongue.
Kind regards from rew.
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3 Years Ago
Thank you. This is what my inner muse wanted written at the time so that is what came about
First off I'm on here to post my writing to have an outlet for my emotions. You will find a variety of poems. If you like take a moment and stroll through this poets mind.
Secondly be kind to each .. more..