Dance Laugh Understand

Dance with me
In the pouring rain
Kiss me with wet lips
As the sky cries

Dance with me
But for a moment
Laugh with me
But for a second
Understand me
But for a lifetime

Laugh with me
Under the midnight sky
As joy rises
Circling the clouds

Dance with me
But for a moment
Laugh with me
But for a second
Understand me
But for a lifetime

Understand me
Deep within your heart
Grasp who I am in your bones
Please don't make me feel so alone

Reviews

[William Liston]

This reads like a passionate love song, with the words flowing in harmony and the repetition giving resonance to the theme. I love the delicate simplicity in this piece as well as your unique descriptions in how they express the essence of your lover. Your first stanza, with its imagery (the "sky crying" ... ahhh lovely) sets the ambience perfectly, and I love how you keep that same sense of passion and wonder throughout.
Though (a minor critique) I think it would read smoother if only the lines that began new sentences were capitalized (as opposed to every line), the message still bleeds through with eloquence and clarity. This was penned with a heavenly touch.

- William Liston

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you so much for your kind review. It is much like a love song. It is some deep feeling from my heart

[Weeping willow]

Love the images that flow through this one. Dancing with a lover.Endless dancing into Love;-]

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for your kind words.

[An owl on the moon]

The dancing, how it is life giving. Beautiful reflections of love, on finding the joy of oneness in the endless dance, another to move through each day with. Wondrous.

[Poetic Beauty]

The dance is beautiful only if the participant is willing

[An owl on the moon]

So painfully true, though the memories of movement can bring joy in moments.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is so very true.