This reads like a passionate love song, with the words flowing in harmony and the repetition giving resonance to the theme. I love the delicate simplicity in this piece as well as your unique descriptions in how they express the essence of your lover. Your first stanza, with its imagery (the "sky crying" ... ahhh lovely) sets the ambience perfectly, and I love how you keep that same sense of passion and wonder throughout.
Though (a minor critique) I think it would read smoother if only the lines that began new sentences were capitalized (as opposed to every line), the message still bleeds through with eloquence and clarity. This was penned with a heavenly touch.
- William Liston
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your kind review. It is much like a love song. It is some deep feeling from my.. read moreThank you so much for your kind review. It is much like a love song. It is some deep feeling from my heart
This reads like a passionate love song, with the words flowing in harmony and the repetition giving resonance to the theme. I love the delicate simplicity in this piece as well as your unique descriptions in how they express the essence of your lover. Your first stanza, with its imagery (the "sky crying" ... ahhh lovely) sets the ambience perfectly, and I love how you keep that same sense of passion and wonder throughout.
Though (a minor critique) I think it would read smoother if only the lines that began new sentences were capitalized (as opposed to every line), the message still bleeds through with eloquence and clarity. This was penned with a heavenly touch.
- William Liston
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your kind review. It is much like a love song. It is some deep feeling from my.. read moreThank you so much for your kind review. It is much like a love song. It is some deep feeling from my heart
i need all these things...someone to laugh with , to cry with , to share moments with...but most of all someone to understand me for a lifetime....to accept all sides of me...i love the line "grasp who i am in your bones"
those calcium deposits can be rich with love.
j.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
You got the whole idea. We need someone who understands us deep inside.
Laugh with me /// But for a second /// Understand me /// But for a lifetime ...
.. quite the lines you've come up with. It's must to arrange some "understanding" especially when it comes to "love" -- the faithfulness of trust. It's ev'n the understanding that stands the trust of one's life, and it's love that stands the partner for lifetime. Such beauty of words you've poured down in words. Enjoyed reading this. After a very long span of time, i read something valuable and certainly.. quite pleasant as well.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you. The last stanza is because I feel as if my boyfriend doesn't understand me sometimes and .. read moreThank you. The last stanza is because I feel as if my boyfriend doesn't understand me sometimes and really at the end of the day that's all that want.
7 Years Ago
Without fighting & cliches in love-ship, there's no love-relations. Sometimes, it's okay not to unde.. read moreWithout fighting & cliches in love-ship, there's no love-relations. Sometimes, it's okay not to understand each other but live... 'em to the fullest. It's okay to ignore one's scars, sometimes, but not always. He'll understand you... with time, if he truly loves you by all his means. So chillax. Enjoy the moment he brings to your beautiful love to make it more beautiful living. Cheers!
We all long to be loved, cherished, understood.
However, if you go by the writing published on this site, very few find a true love.
It seems unhappiness is a far better pal to the poet than happy.
Very well written Beauty
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you for the kind words. Yes long lasting love is hard to find. I found my soulmate yet alas we.. read moreThank you for the kind words. Yes long lasting love is hard to find. I found my soulmate yet alas we are not together.
7 Years Ago
Well beauty they'll be plenty more busses to ride on, perhaps one of these will take you on your lif.. read moreWell beauty they'll be plenty more busses to ride on, perhaps one of these will take you on your life's journey
I in a five year relationship and I love him but trust me it's not the same. But honestly I'm happy .. read moreI in a five year relationship and I love him but trust me it's not the same. But honestly I'm happy most of the time.
The thrills of love bring vivacity and an exuberance for life that can be spontaneous or pragmatic but either way, an opportunity that must be seized upon!
Gentle, worthwhile and needed place create by your words. Dance, laugh and understanding. Three things we must have to know joy and happiness. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I am so glad you understood this poem. You always have wise words my friend Coyote
Thank you. There are many ways this piece can be taken for each person has had their own experiences.. read moreThank you. There are many ways this piece can be taken for each person has had their own experiences in life.
First off I'm on here to post my writing to have an outlet for my emotions. You will find a variety of poems. If you like take a moment and stroll through this poets mind.
Secondly be kind to each .. more..