Unrelenting Scars

poem

Each word, burns

Like a hornet’s sting

Until the nerves

Are completely numb

 

Each argument, slashes

Like a Samara’s sword

Penetrating deep

Into muscle

Causing the pulsing

To stop

 

Each Incident, crushes

Like a mountain’s demise

The soul smothered

Vibrancy begins to cease

Fading into grey

 

Each searing moment

Brands as a whole

Leaving raised scares

In its unrelenting wake

Emotions begin to shift

Shaking, unstoppable quakes.

 

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Acute and eloquent depiction of emotional pain. 4th line from the bottom, I believe you mean "scars," tho' I kinda like "scares" ;-).

"Each Incident, crushes/Like a mountain's demise" captures the weight of emotional investment gone sour. Interpersonal love is an art, and unfortunately, one which all too few take seriously as art, whether it's the typical emotional illiteracy of the male of the species, or the vulnerability of the female of the species expecting water from a stone.

We do become wise with courage, persistence, insight, and openness. May the "Unrelenting Scars" heal to abiding Love embracing all Life.

[Poetic Beauty]

We all have those not so wonderful days. It was one of those moments. I am glad you liked this piece. I did mean scars but it sounds good as scares so I might leave it that way. Sometimes the best things could be accidental mistakes.

[Ladysue]

A very well articulated piece. The opening and ending have a very strong impact. I felt this one throughout. Very creatively done.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. I think we all have moments like this in our lives or relationships.

[Tina Kline]

An impressive poem. Those we love hurt us the most and are the ones who leave lasting scars.

[Poetic Beauty]

So very true.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The mocking tone of this piece is the most surprising, a detailed and fabulous description that knocked me! well done, good read.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. Life is full of many different emotions.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such emotion felt from this...and reminders...i have both been stung by a hornet...and stung often by words from a couple significant others who became exes...words really do sting...and that sting makes us feel such an uncomfortable pain.

[Poetic Beauty]

People don't think before they speak sometimes whether it be a significant other or another person. Words do hurt.

[Lucifer Jones]

Powerful............................. Felt it.

[Poetic Beauty]

thank you. I am glad you could feel this piece.