Liquid Comfort

Liquid comfort

Massages sensitized skin

Penetrating slowly

Encompassing the mind

 

Muscles relax

As tension

Melts away

As the mind calms

 

Steam penetrates

The sultry air

Giving relief

That swirls

With molecular heat

 

Warm droplets

Dance upon the floor

As cotton embraces

The serene body

 

A satisfying shower

Is the perfect way

To end the day

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a great description of an everyday activity...and how unappreciated that activity actually is...we think usually of only the purpose of the shower...not the benefit of relaxation.

it is likened to the idea that it's the journey that matters, not necessarily the destination.

[Poetic Beauty]

I am glad you liked this piece and how it showed a different side to just taking a shower.

[arpita]

I really liked how you took the simple subject of taking a shower and made it into a beautiful poem. the poem itself flowed pretty nicely. you used figurative language with good effect too.

[Poetic Beauty]

When possible I like to play on words surprising the reader at the end.

[Karen]

I love the imagery you use in this poem to depict what could very well be overlooked by others in this poem. After all, it's the poet who can find beauty in the mundane, and a poem in the everyday activities of our lives. Thank you, beautiful poet!

[Poetic Beauty]

I have found in my life a shower is the quickest and simplest way to relax and ease stress.

[Trace]

When I read the title, For some reason, I expected it to be about something to drink. However, a shower is much more enjoyable, and relaxing, specially when shared with someone to wash you back. It is also a wonderful way to start the day. Much calmer than my poem: "The Shower" Enjoyed the read. Trace

[David Wesley]

Smooth piece. I enjoyed the closeness of the first (3) stanzas. Each of them share similar metaphors, very fuzzy and soothing. I see the transition in your fourth stanza and I think you could have ended the piece there, the final stanza seems irrelevant. I wonder, I thought of the last two lines of the third stanza, "That swirls/ With molecular heat" - maybe just one line, "Swirling molecular heat" or something along that style. Helps keeps your metaphor tight. Your writing is minimal, but descriptive so the word choice can be challenging. I look forward to reading other pieces. ^_^

[Poetic Beauty]

It could be worded that way. I would have to go back and see if I liked it the second way better or not. I am glad you liked this poem. Thank you for taking the time to read.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Funny, I was thinking about getting up soon to take my shower and what do I find, your wonderful tribute to the gifts bestowed by warm water and steam. Now if I could just take my PC in with me all would be good. Too much to do and too little time . . . Great poem!

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. Some days I feel like I don't have enough time for all the things I want to do either. There is nothing better than a hot shower after a long day.

[David Scott]

Well, we just met and I feel like showering with you is so natural... Odd. Ha.
You do know how to relax the mind and get the grimy tension to wash away.
A very fine poem.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. I feel there is beauty in many of the mundane things.

[David Scott]

Yes... but there is nothing "mundane" about a shower... It is one of those special joys in life. Some more special than others, as we can see here.

[The Analog Kid]

Hi K,

I was just thinking about massages and found this. Perfect write, PB :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Thanks. How are you my dear friend? I am glad you enjoyed this write. I feel like a hot shower can melt away the stresses that affect and effect us during our day. The oneness and quiet.

[The Analog Kid]

I hear that. I am doing real good today. Everything went well. The quiet is priceless!

[Poetic Beauty]

Everything went well? What have you been up to lol. Have you written anything new?

[The Analog Kid]

LOL..I will tell you on FB or email.

[Poetic Beauty]

switchign to fb now

[The Analog Kid]

I am sorry I missed your message. We will chat soon...LOL

[Robbie~xoxo~]

What a serene imagery... gives me tingles!
I felt the Zen moment, and luscious steam washing away the stress...
This is a refreshing read... thank you for sharing!~xoxo~:)

[Poetic Beauty]

I always feel the solitude of the shower and the steam melt away the days tension. I like to write about every day things that people don't think about, from time to time. It gives you a whole different perspective on the mundane tasks of life.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It does give you a whole new perspective... I think I will have to indulge in that! lol
You wrote it beautifully. :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Next time while in the shower enjoy the moment and the quiet instead of rushing through it. You will feel the tension just melt.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Thanks, I will remember that... time seems to be the devil these days.. argggg!

[Poetic Beauty]

I hear you but I have learned one thing if nothing else enjoy the shower. It is total me time lol