Satire Innocence

Satire drips from silver tongues

Screaming about tornadic ideas

Flooding the already saturated air

A hurricane of anger

Envelopes the candles flame

Taring apart 

The rainbows hues

Scattering polka dots

Of delicate color

Splattering us with

Shattered innocence

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I love the use of words and description.
"A hurricane of anger
Envelopes the candles flame
Taring apart
The rainbows hues"
Sometime we turn to anger to find peace. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

The first time of this poem stuck in my mind for a few days and then the rest of it just kind of flowed from my brain.

[Veronica Chandler]

Quite a stirring and powerful little piece; I am amazed how much can be said by so few words. This was a tasty little slice of life. "Splattering us with shattered innocence." so much said in such a small space.

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem started as one line. The very first line was stuck in my head for a few days and when I sat down to put it on paper the rest of it flowed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the use of weather events to describe feelings in this...

the tornadoes...yes, our state seems to invite them often, especially in central illinois where i gather you might be from...

we have them enough here in southern illinois...

innocence is always shattered too soon these days.

growing up comes way too fast...and yet adult act as children way too often...

jacob

[Poetic Beauty]

That is the idea of this piece and that sometimes we hide our heads from reality of things going on around us.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Nothing robs a child of their innocence more then witnessing or being the victim of a violent crime. Very nicely done.

[Poetic Beauty]

That is a good thought. Although this is actually about life in general and how as adults sometimes we have our heads stuck in the clouds and don't see the reality of things going on around us and it takes someone to have a satire attitude to bring the full view of how life is.

[Don Shaw]

Good work. Tornadic ideas i love that.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thanks for taking the time to read. I am glad you liked the idea of this piece

[Don Shaw]

using nature to your advantage i love that

[Poetic Beauty]

I like to use color, smell and taste as well into my poems.

[Don Shaw]

me too

[BL]

Very sad, but you have created a rich infusion and collage of thoughts with a relatively short poem

[Poetic Beauty]

It does have a bit of a darker tone to it but sometimes the world around us isn't all sunshine and rainbows. I love to write about a great many different things. I am glad you found this piece richly infused with thought.

[Larry Dyson]

Chaos...dripping tornadoes..hmmm

[Poetic Beauty]

Powerful words those are.

[gabrielle]

This write is quite different from your other pieces that i read because of its dark theme. However, the way you painted rich imagery through your words is unwavering. beautiful write!

[Poetic Beauty]

I write about many things. The first line was stuck in my mind for two days so I had to let my muse have her way and I sat down and wrote the words that formed in the creative part of my mind where my muse resides.

[Jack...]

Yes indeed, that can defilitely be the outcome. Nice

[Poetic Beauty]

Sometimes we like to hide from the facts of life and it takes a bit of satire to wake up our eyes to the world around us.