Sometimes

Just an idea that came to mind

Sometimes…

The rain penetrates

Deep within the soul

Drowning

Every fibrous cell

 

Sometimes…

The droplets drip

Saturating the neutrons

Soaking

Deep within side

 

Sometimes…

Emotions sink

Turning into cerulean blue

Painting

The whole mood

 

Sometimes…

The murky waters

Get clouded with mud

Veiling

The happiness inside

Reviews

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Poetic Beauty

This piece moved me.

I cannot adversely critique the style. It is well expressed.

I love the way you mix colours - Cerulaean blue; painting; murky, clouded; mud - within this piece.

As for content, the metaphor of rain skilfully counterpoints the happiness within. The notion in your profile of wasting our lives not realising our own potential, forgetting we only have the shot at life and we must make it count, or we will have led futile lives.

Part of that experience of life must be in my opinion to help, be be kind to, empathtic with, move and educate others with the little we have to give.

Maybe that is one of our roles as writers.

This piece has helped me on my journey in life as I hope it will have those of others who read it, in much the same way as I hope you may have gained emotionally by writing and sharing it.

I hope to read more of your writing soon.

With my encouragegmnt and warmest regards

James

[Poetic Beauty]

I am glad this piece has helped you on your journey. We can't be happy all the time. It is part of the human nature and for me the weather and vibes others give off can affect my mood. I believe that adding in taste touch smell and color to pieces allow the reader to fully experience what the writer is trying to convey and can really make the emotion jump out, taking flight. I write poetry with very little punctuation. I don't want it to distract from what I am trying to get across.

[Lily Mae]

I felt each drop as your words evaporated into my thoughts.. Beautiful as always.. xo

[Poetic Beauty]

You always feel the meanings in my poems.

[the_stoic]

Sometimes...
the heartfelt words
fail to penetrate
the stolid soul

Sometimes...
the turbulent emotions
fail to ignite
the blunt conscience

Sometimes...
the guileless tears
fail to shake up
the passive disposition

Sometimes...
the lustrous life
fails to comprehend
the 'perpetual' sometimes

Sometimes.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for taking a moment to read.

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

yes anything can happen sometimes,anything beautiful ! nicely put,liked it.

[Poetic Beauty]

I am glad you liked the poem

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sometimes the sun shines through the rain and makes a rainbow.

[Poetic Beauty]

It was a dreary rainy day here yesterday and this thought popped into my mind.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Rain is a great muse indeed.

[Poetic Beauty]

I love rain.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Veiling - I adore that word, a very well written piece of how blind we can be to ourseleves, well done, good read.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for taking a moment to read. I am glad you liked the use of the word veiling. I have my favorite words that I like to use.

[Jack...]

And sometimes you come across a piece as beautiful as this. Very nice

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. I like to write about many different emotions. We all feel a wide array of emotions on a day by day basis.

[gabrielle]

..but most of the time, everything will return back to normal.
an idea so lovely written!

[Poetic Beauty]

It was rainy and dreary here yesterday and the idea popped in my mind.

[The Analog Kid]

Nice. This is the way I sometimes follow a pattern...to a point. Good stuff. I was in the same "deep" motif on the one I am working on now.

[Poetic Beauty]

Cool. It is a dreary rainy day here and the idea just came to mind.

[The Analog Kid]

It works real well, PB. Hope you are doing well!

[Poetic Beauty]

I am good actually. No longer working two jobs. I am a lot happier.

[The Analog Kid]

Two jobs can be hectic. Good for you.

[Poetic Beauty]

Yeah I am lucky. I wouldn't have been able to quit the second job without him.