Sometimes

Just an idea that came to mind

Sometimes…

The rain penetrates

Deep within the soul

Drowning

Every fibrous cell

 

Sometimes…

The droplets drip

Saturating the neutrons

Soaking

Deep within side

 

Sometimes…

Emotions sink

Turning into cerulean blue

Painting

The whole mood

 

Sometimes…

The murky waters

Get clouded with mud

Veiling

The happiness inside

Reviews

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Poetic Beauty

This piece moved me.

I cannot adversely critique the style. It is well expressed.

I love the way you mix colours - Cerulaean blue; painting; murky, clouded; mud - within this piece.

As for content, the metaphor of rain skilfully counterpoints the happiness within. The notion in your profile of wasting our lives not realising our own potential, forgetting we only have the shot at life and we must make it count, or we will have led futile lives.

Part of that experience of life must be in my opinion to help, be be kind to, empathtic with, move and educate others with the little we have to give.

Maybe that is one of our roles as writers.

This piece has helped me on my journey in life as I hope it will have those of others who read it, in much the same way as I hope you may have gained emotionally by writing and sharing it.

I hope to read more of your writing soon.

With my encouragegmnt and warmest regards

James

[Poetic Beauty]

I am glad this piece has helped you on your journey. We can't be happy all the time. It is part of the human nature and for me the weather and vibes others give off can affect my mood. I believe that adding in taste touch smell and color to pieces allow the reader to fully experience what the writer is trying to convey and can really make the emotion jump out, taking flight. I write poetry with very little punctuation. I don't want it to distract from what I am trying to get across.

[maryjaneuy]

you write like an old soul :D

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. That is a great compliment.

[shallimarRose]

Lovely.. I love the lack of colors in the ""mood""
kind of sad, beautifully written.. shallimar

[Poetic Beauty]

Most of my pieces are filled with color and this one isn't.

[Veronica Chandler]

Your work is always a pleasure for me to take in; It swirls around inside my mind and dances its way into my heart. "Sometimes..." adds a bit of open space and roominess to the piece.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thanks. I think we all have minor moments of depression or sadness.

[KAREN]

Beautifully written!

[Poetic Beauty]

There is beauty in sadness sometimes lol sometimes.

[KAREN]

Sadness yeah, but the poem even though is sad you written it so beautifully that the reader can feel the emotions!

[Arabdha]

This is so sad...! I could feel the pain and sympathize with every word..
"Sometimes…

Emotions sink

Turning into cerulean blue

Painting

The whole mood"
I love how you use colors and elements from nature to reflect feelings within..!

[Poetic Beauty]

I think colors and tastes can amplify emotions

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think this was observant, clever and optimisitc, a pleasure to read

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem was written on one of those rainy days where the emotions just seep in.

[Aehr]

Lovely. Just plain lovely. :D good job, and beautiful description :)

[Poetic Beauty]

glad you enjoyed the emotions and descriptions in this piece. Rain can make for great scenery in emotions.

[Yellow Butterfly]

In life 'sometimes' these words are needed to be said....


Thought provoking read.... thanks for sharing....

[Poetic Beauty]

I am glad you enjoyed this piece and found it thought provoking.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of rain to make your point. Droplets of rain can bring laughter or sadness. I like the flow of thoughts and how you ended the poem. Thank you for sharing excellent poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. I am glad you liked the emotions that were painted in the piece.