What If

What If

A Poem by Akira
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a poem written from bordum

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What if the sky was purple

What if the world was spuare

What if there were no people anywere

What if boys were girls

They would feel her pain

They would finaly see that we are not the same

They would treat us different and better than they already do

 Then you want to sue

Cause all you asked was

What if?

© 2008 Akira


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A good summary of the questions that go on in the people's minds! And especially women's thoughts! Very interesting and gives an insight into many different feelings such as inequity, frustration, doubt...A good focus on the difference between boys and girls/men and women...However, you might not like me saying this but it is a very general thing to say that the boys would treat girls differently, alluding that all are jerks (don't get me wrong it can be true : ) ) But not all ARE...But its good to point out that we are different: i like the words "They would finally see that we are not the same". its a very simple sentence and seems obvious, but as you say there are some problems about that so its good to write!
Good!

Posted 15 Years Ago


I liked that. I did a What If poem on a child's mind. I will have to post it sometime.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Great work, I'm a stickler for grammer/spelling though, haha,
that's the only thing from this being exhuberantly unique, I believe.
Great work, do continue, just tighten up the mechanics a bit more and you'll have it!~P

Posted 15 Years Ago


this is a cute little poem. Yea, you right what if men could be women. They just don't know how hard it is being a female.I will keep this little poem in my library for future references. KEEP it up girlfriend.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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