Fluttering Glow ~ (Sestina)

form: Sestina

 

 

When I look at you, my eyes dance,
teardrops cascading like petals.
You say, perhaps it is the starlight,
but these emotions say it's love;
this constant fever, fluttering
like butterflies in my heart.

Dreaming of no other, this heart,
as I pass, flowers begin to dance
hips sway, eyelashes fluttering
stepping lightly upon falling petals.
Winds seem to whisper true love
sprinkling shimmer into the starlight.

Gazing at you in the starlight;
your affection encircling my heart
in a sanctuary of love.
Attuned with nature in dance
in a whirlpool of petals,
the sounds of sigh fluttering;

fireflies in colors, fluttering
in the magic of misty starlight
with the nectar of petals
filling the desire in this heart
even in darkness, daffodils dance
nourished by the power of love.

All of the Earth in need of love
every breath of life, fluttering
in this magical, celestial dance
we engage in, with the starlight,
raging in the heart
streaming from the petals.

We drink from the petals
this nurturing sip of love
feeding thirsty hearts
together fluttering
under the same starlight
in this survival dance.

Take my hand, dance through petals
In this starlight, making love
Feel the fluttering...you own my heart.

♥♥


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Author's Note

SESTINA

The Sestina, a French form, is an intricate form of six unrhymed stanzas of six lines each, followed by a Tercet (three lines.) This type of form works well for the poet who wants to examine a subject from different viewpoints. The Sestina depends on the repetition of end-words, but be aware that only the end word repeats, not as in other French forms where the entire line repeats.

Choose any 6 words, such as:

a) sunshine, poems, c) sister, d) silk, e) wood, f) flowers

The pattern:
Stanza 1: a, b, c, d, e, f. Stanza 2: f, a, e, b, d, c. Sanza 3: c, f, d, a, b, e. Stanza 4: e, c, b, f, a, d. Stanza 5: d, e, a, c, f, b. Stanza 6: b, d, f, e, c, a. Tercet : ab, cd, ef.

Reviews

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Quite beautiful. You should create a contest for this type of poetry. I would give it a whirl


Back to the review LOL


Gazing at you in the starlight;
your affection encircling my heart
in a sanctuary of love.
Attuned with nature in dance
in a whirlpool of petals,
the sounds of sigh fluttering;

fireflies in colors, fluttering
in the magic of misty starlight
with the nectar of petals
filling the desire in this heart
even in darkness, daffodils dance
nourished by the power of love.


That part was so lovely



Well done!

[R J Askew]

Nice one. Very positive. Don't know why, but the word 'petals' bossed my mind as I read. I just got strong images of active petals. The poem is delightful in its intent and execution, being tightly written. I was also taken with these words ... 'cascading...sprinkling...encircling...streaming...nurturing...feeding' ... which are all well chosen to go with fluttering and dance. It's a very active poem and, while a romantic dance, does lead to the actual making of love, which seems fitting for the envoy verse. I also like the underpinning realism of 'in this survival dance'. I'd say the strength of the content definitely more than holds its own with the form here. So you've pulled it off! And I enjoyed it.

[D. Nelson]

very, very beautiful and emotional poem.

and you managed very well to keep to the form of the poetry and still retain that valuable emotion and connectivity with the reader that's so important.

great work

[Lady Diana]

this my friend is really good.I love anything to do with romance and very well written hugs Diana