Still Blooming~

a poem written for my friends~

 

 

 

Fly with me...

Let the stars sprinkle dust
upon our humble halos,

and laugh with me
as caress of cloud
tickles your tender side,

for, we can still be children.

Come, grow in my secret garden;
petals painted in hue of love,
our hearts entwined in vine,

and when your sorrow swells,

emptiness tangled in your tresses,
let my whispered warmth
woo your weary mind,

and if you should fall

into a bed of darkness
take my hand,
and go on living
through my borrowed breath,

and should you wake no longer,

feel my friendship
still blooming

in flowers at your feet.





♥♥

Reviews

[R J Askew]

This also works in a wider way than the previous two more individualistic ones I've read. These two lines are delightfully poetic, also nicely balanced at 5 syllables apiece, but the main point is that they are very audible, at least to this reader...

let my whispered warmth
woo your weary mind,

Through my borrowed breath ... is also a lovely line ... and the final image of petals at your friends feet is marvellous ... it also is a great way to kiss off the poem.

[Wondering Mind]

"for, we can still be children."! What a lovely thought!
Beautiful imagery and poetic skill. This is such a bittersweet write.
"feel my friendship---still blooming---in flowers at your feet" A wonderful way to word devotion....Gone but never forgotten!

[Michael X]

Beautifully written and expressed, the flow and imagery combine with soft effect,
has sentimental value and endearing quality that gives it a sense of ambience,
embracing and passionate, the want of caring, excellent poem lynda.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This is wonderful. These words strung together in such beauty.


Fly with me...

Let the stars sprinkle dust
upon our humble halos,

and laugh with me
as caress of cloud
tickles your tender side,

for, we can still be children.


This part took my breath away.



emptiness tangled in your tresses,
let my whispered warmth
woo your weary mind,

and if you should fall

into a bed of darkness
take my hand,
and go on living
through my borrowed breath,


I do want to read more of your poetry.

[Sasavet]

Mother of god......This is amazing. Seriousely, Wow. I don't even know what to say except that i wish i could write like that!!

AMAZING job.

[laceyjane23]

this is a beautiful poem! it really show the meaning of true friendship, keep on writing!
laceyjane