For So Long Now

For so long now I have seen,

Only those things that have not gotten done,

Only those things where I have not succeeded,

Only those battles that I have not won.

For so long now I have been,

The person that was different,

The person that was wrong,

The person that was discontent.

For so long now I have felt,

Only the feelings of loneliness,

Only the feelings of remorse,

Only the feelings of lovelessness.

It is difficult for me,

To see me as you see,

To understand these feelings,

And in complete believe.

Hold me close my darling,

And I will hold you tight,

Together through our love,

I will learn what's right.

Reviews

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

This is truly beautiful, and just, wow. I absolutely love this, and I can totally relate. This is how I see myself, and the one I love doesn't understand. When you look at yourself one way for a long time, and then someone comes along and tries to tell you that that isn't how you really are, that you're better than that.. Well it's quite hard to believe. You captured that feeling perfectly.

My favorite part:


"It is difficult for me,

To see me as you see,

To understand these feelings,

And in complete believe.




Hold me close my darling,

And I will hold you tight,

Together through our love,

I will learn what's right."


Together with that person, over time, I believe you can learn to see yourself how they see you.. Beautiful job with this, once again.

[The Refined Poet]

this is beautiful... loved the last stanza

[AleyshaRosa]

Beautiful, Patrick.
I suppose sometimes it takes one we love to see the good in ourselves; the person who can achieve. A goal without a plan is simply a wish, but the hand of another can help us create our path.
I really appreciate this poem.
Koodoos

[mandy]

patrick, this poem showed great insight. i think a lot of us feel like that at times. and someone who loves u unconditionally can make all te difference..also a sense of humor helps! maybe we are here to balance out all those people who think of themselves as: highly successful, full of charm, beautiful, always right, etc.....but just for the record, i see you as a nice person with talent and charm...and it is a good write!

[Cwortknee]

I'm a huge fan of how you've chosen to construct this poem, it really adds emphasis to the insecurity that most of us are burdened by. This is a very touching poem, and I definitely enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing!

[Emberlorna]

So many of us feel like we're not good enough.. it would be nice to see ourselves the way that others see us. This was so sad yet so beautiful. I loved it :}

[Dr. Wood ?]

You clearly have faith in LOVE...Keep that thought

[Adam Whitworth]

thanks for the effort

[David Scott]

Love heals and time shows that it is indeed only relative after all...
Enjoyed the poem Patrick.