fam geil

The steps I took,
I thought you'd take.
The heart that shook,
I thought you had made.
You see this alternative place we stand?
That is where you take my hand-
oh, the envy that I face
when I seek a town in which you'd leave.

Reviews

[Androglossia]

Emotionally driven. It clearly says that fairy tales don't always have happy ending. You have an excellent flow of speech in a premeditated fashion. You're good at writing in a formal metrical pattern that easily contrasts thoughts expressed in different units. Good job.

[Admiral Kirk]

This wonderfully written poem seems to speak of regret and nostalgia, and also an intense longing... Is that right? I really enjoyed this poem; it really speaks to me. It sounds a but like a romance that never was, which I know first-hand. Great poem!

[Michael X]

heartfelt and melancholy to the point of letting go, and idea becomes reason
to move on, beautiful meaning that speaks of life and memories. excellent