let us talk, about the weather

a cloud

floating by

the nighttime sky

 

tropic thunders

arctic winds

desert storms

 

the cloud

drifting by

from latitudes to meridians

 

too warm and wet

too cold and harsh

too hot and dry

 

stuck

in the Bermuda triangle

of past, present, future

 

rain

cry

tears flow by

 

a little rain

to start the day

end the night

 

harvest crops

give life to life

like a sponge

 

emptied.

Reviews

[Inda]

This another resonating piece that just gets poured into our heads, great job!

[plainme]

Thank you, Inda!

[The Girl That Let You G..]

Detached...almost void of any emotions...A rather clever write. Love the mental imagery. Great job

[plainme]

confusion perhaps? Thank you very much!

[abraxus89]

It was good but I found that in some parts it lack a little emphasis or vision for a better word.

In general I got the feeling that you were describing time and how it passes us by in different ways. Again i could be wrong.

nice job

[plainme]

Maybe I was a bit to fast with writing this one but I felt the need to get it out as fast as possible. Reviewing it makes me spot the easy words and gives me ideas of other things to say, but I think if I did that now I would lose the essence of what I felt at that particular moment. Consider us, a timeless cloud here, trying to find the right place to hang, but every time we're at another place, we crave the other. Thanks for the review!

[abraxus89]

Your right, in a way we crave what we dont have and neglect what we do have. the here, the now, the present.

Anytime!

[popourii]

I really enjoyed this:

"stuck
in the Bermuda triangle
of past, present, future"

The visual and idea it gave me was very original I thought. Great piece :)

[plainme]

it was right in front of me, the idea of the actual triangle and the idea of time caught in there. Thanks again for the review, I really enjoy your view on the poems!

[popourii]

That's a perfect way of explaining it too, awesome!