A prayer for the night

Throwing stones

Sinking bones

Deepened scars

Broken bars

 

Unleash the beast

That lives within

To live, to die

To lose, to win

 

Move to the side of her bed

Make space for her radiating head

I am finally caught in someone’s web

 

Throwing stones

Sinking bones

Healing scars

Life on mars

 

Forget what’s been

To win, a daily pest

Remember not

A lifelong quest

 

Sweet dreams child

I will wake over you

Shield your mind from nightly mares

Guarding dreams that you brew

 

Throwing stones

Floating bones

Remaining scars

End of wars

Reviews

[popourii]

I really enjoyed this stanza

"Sweet dreams child
I will wake over you
Shield your mind from nightly mares
Guarding dreams that you brew"

I mean, it's so cool! I feel like you can take that and write a whole new poem stemming just from that. Really good read, thank you for sharing with us!

[plainme]

Thank you so much, perhaps it something for the near future! I am very glad you liked it!

[SamanthaSweeney]

I love the progression throughout this poem.
The repetition adds much to the outcome of the poem. The first stanza is truly intriguing and captivating; very lovely opening. I can feel deep protection within the lines of this poem.
Thank you for sharing !
I read your about, took me a while to share my work too.
Trust you have made the right choice :)

[plainme]

Thank you so much for your review, I'm really glad you like it! It was a relief to receive a review after the first post. I made the right choice for sure!

[SamanthaSweeney]

No problem !! I enjoyed reading it :)

[Sami Khalil]

Sounded like a song I would really like...:)

[plainme]

well I like the idea of it being sung, but you could call poetry that, songs of the heart! thanks!

[Sami Khalil]

True , true , true...You are welcome...:)

[Dean Kuch®]

A very eerily written poem you've created here. The repetition of the first two lines in stanzas 1, 4 & 7 lent a haunting, expressively ardent atmosphere to the piece as a whole. This flows from the tongue when read aloud. I would encourage others to experience this wonderful villanelle in the same way for themselves.

[plainme]

I had to read it aloud myself just now, and I know what you mean now. Thank you very much!

[Dean Kuch®]

You are welcome. This one begs to be read out loud, it was fantastic!

[Inda]

This is brilliant! So much said and the flow is fantastic! Great job!

[plainme]

Thank you a lot, your review is highly appreciated!