THE GROUNDED MAN

This story is fictious. Enjoy it .

STORY TYPE:- FICTION ( short)STORY NAME:- THE GROUNDED MAN ....( RAGDA)CHARACTERS:- RAGDA :- GROUNDED MANBAYMAX :- HIGH SCHOOL GIRL THE GROUNDED MANHi I am Ragda a grounded man. I have legs but thats not work. I cant stand on legs so i crawl on the ground. I move with the help of hands and chest by crawling like a lizard or snakem i lived in a special graveyard where i sleep comfortably i have small tv. I have some medicines and food too gifted by people. The graveyard has oxygen gas system too. I can breathe pure air. I never went more distance away from it. There is a road from where i always see moving buses. One day i saw a beatiful girl on the road waiting for her school bus. I crawled towards her too see her well. Oh i feel pain in my chest hand when i crawl. Suddenly i saw a bus rolled over her she was now a victim of accident. She was laying and crying with pain on the ground. No people here to help her. I crawled towards her and took her to near my graveyard . She was full of blood on her body . I took out my first aid and gave her treatment. She cant see me she is sleeping in consiousness. I felt for her my heart beat run fast to see her in this situation i dont know why she was beatiful i touched her on face she was cute. I never saw girls too close in my life. My eyes were too close to her eyes. I can feel his breathing with my breathing close to her. I started to attract towards her and its my love at first sight. I imagined i can keep her in my graveyard as i lived alone. Suddenly policemen came and snatched her away from me. They took her to hospital. I was sad now. I cried on my poor life. I felt she was now my friend. I wanted to see her again and i dont know the way to hospital. I heard her name is baymax by policemen. I started crawling on the ground towards road. My clothes were full of mud. I was asking everyone on road to the way to hospital. I started crossing road by saving myself from tyres of bus cars bikes. The people call me mad then. Yes i am mad in love to her. My clothes were tearing and body were scratching due to hard surface of road. I didnt stop crawling and my body became wet now with blood. I had energy of love that made me crawling for more than 3 hours. Finaly i reached hospital . The staff of hospital didnt let me entered becoz i was dirty. I look like begger. I wanted to see her i was feeling for her is she safe now. At last i had to go away from hospital. In sad mood i was crossing the road. I didnt care the tyres of vehicle. I lost my energy lost my hope of happiness to live. This is ended the life is ended under the heavy tires of bus. I am dead now i am soul now. I knew now that she is safe. Doctor said she is safe due to a stranger first aid that made me proud but what make me sad is that i am dead and she is grounded girl now.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading it.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your story is a very original & unusual allegory. I'm not sure if there is a deeper meaning, or what it might be. Your English is a little messy, but it's possible to understand your meaning. The strong point of your writing is that you include many details that help us visualize the situation. In places, you repeat some details more than is necessary to understand. As a personal preference, I do not like love stories that are based on physical appearances. To me, this is a shallow way to perceive another human being. It seems to only value those who are beautiful, but what about those who are not? But this is only a personal view of mine. Many people write love stories based on beauty alone. Clearly this guy was so taken by her beauty, he was willing to die for it. I won't make any suggestions, becuz you did not welcome them on a previous review. You clearly want your stories to be the way you write them.

[anna.j]

I would separate out into paragraphs to help pace reading :)

[pksmart]

Thanks barley girl. I like ur true review. Yea i am weak in english, its my big problem. I can imagine very much better but i have no words to explain them in writing. I welcome all ur reviews dear from my heart but i didnt show it in writing. I became ur fr only when i saw ur great reviews. I want to learn something from u. Thats why i am here .