Sorrow Seekers

Sorrow Seekers

A Poem by pixieheart97
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Got bored/Facebook keeps freezing/spent too much time on deviantArt and Trade Me so I wrote a poem

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Forgiven a roses thorn but never a jealous friend,

Forgotten the words but never shall the heart mend,

Fovever hearing whispers, softly left unspoken,

 

Picking up the shards but the mirror is still broken,

Pieces of a puzzle but one could never fit,

Pacing in the candlelight yet no candles are lit,

 

Heal will the wounds but the reflection is left scarred,

Halation on a photograph and the memory is marred,

Hither you come to hide from all of the pain,

 

Fathomless hatred knows no gain,
I can see the choir but they shall never sing,

Live to eliminate the sorrows that others seek to bring.

 





By A.Miles (me)
Age:15

© 2012 pixieheart97


Author's Note

pixieheart97
Sorry if it's dumb

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you should post more... Expressing your thoughts isn't dumb - and keeping the emotions inside hurts more.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful idea.Thumbs up.

Posted 12 Years Ago


pixieheart97

12 Years Ago

Thankyou emrick :)
Not dumb in the least, for something written on the spur of the moment, you did a wonderful job of writing. I wish I could do the same. Great stuff.

~Pendragon~

Posted 12 Years Ago


pixieheart97

12 Years Ago

Oh thanks :)
And I'm sure you could!
Bare Trees

12 Years Ago

:)
Nice poem... So many good lines...

Posted 12 Years Ago


pixieheart97

12 Years Ago

Thank you Sami :)
Sami Khalil

12 Years Ago

You are welcome...
Far from dumb, I could put a melody to this in my head.
I sing in a band, and i think this is amazing.


Posted 12 Years Ago


pixieheart97

12 Years Ago

Oh thanks.
Thats so cool. Do you have any videos? I would love to hear you guys :)
Your.. read more
wow, i only saw this NOW.. I'm sorry : I really like this though

Posted 12 Years Ago


pixieheart97

12 Years Ago

Ha, thanks Ree
It's great to say in a word. I never knew one can write such a poem when one gets bored by paltry things on the internet! Brilliant!

The lines have a very curious style and it makes it readable to the end. The thoughts you've poured into them are the ones that are great! You've nailed it well!
Keep it up!

Posted 12 Years Ago


pixieheart97

12 Years Ago

Thankyou Sujash :)
Hi, just a few suggestions on your lovely piece if you don't mind :)

Picking up the shards but the mirror is still broken,
- Picking up shards from a mirror, unbroken

Pieces of a puzzle but one could never fit,
-Here lay pieces of a puzzle, one could never fit

Pacing in the candlelight yet no candles are lit,
- Pacing candle light, yet no candle was lit

Irony/ paradox were used as tools in this piece, the visceral imagery is alive, you may just want to consider the form of your material. Nonetheless, good job dear, keep that amazing hand writing :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


pixieheart97

12 Years Ago

Thankyou Amelie! I really appreciate your suggestions :)
~Just realized how to reply properly~.. read more

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Added on June 8, 2012
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My names Alyssa Miles. I'm from New Zealand. I'm a girl. I've got my heart set on being a singer. I'm trying to learn how to play guitar but I'm taking my time with it. I love music, art, writi.. more..


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