broken promises

this is my teacher's feeling actually

i miss you

i told you when i about to leaving

please always call me or at least message me

because i have jobs

and i cant always beside you

but, why you didn't call me?

why you didn't message me??

i ask you why

then you said you cant because you have problems

i want to know it, share to me, maybe i cloud help

but you said that we shouldn't talk about it

i know, maybe your problems make me worried

but, you know what

i already worried to know that you have problems

and you don't want to share it to me

so, i wont to disturb you

i wont to send you message anymore

it's like we are in stage of cool-off

you know what, i cant stay at that situation

but, that you want

so, what can i do?

i don't want to put myself into shame

so even if i don't want to, i'll do it

you know, you broke your promise

you said that you always call me or at least message me

and don't hidden the truth, because i am is your girlfriend

but, you wont to tell me

what the used of me as your girlfriend?

i can help you, can't i??

Author's Note

sorry if this little bit mess
and sorry about my grammar and wrong word
enjoy it~

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Very nice and I can feel the feelings of the characters. Again, I find it a nice attribute of yours that you can express things in a clear manner.

Though you can organize some of your thoughts in the last paragraphs.

what the used of me as your girlfriend? = what's the use of me as your girlfriend?

Don't sweat the capitalization for I know a great writer that protested by using grammatical errors: e.e cummings

Keep writing :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~
lately i think i really need a grammar fixer DX

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Hahaha a grammar adviser I would suggest. It's better to have yourself fix it so you can learn and no one knows their ideas as well as the owners :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

yea.. but hard to learn grammar if you know :(
my english teacher always say that is almost always use wrong grammar

[Irvette Dauphine]

*that i almost

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Really? Honestly for someone who uses English as a second language, it's good. English is a second language here too. It's really hard.

[Irvette Dauphine]

yea..

[Denis K.]

*hides face with a towel* so sad :(
I like this poem, but kinda hard to understand.
Eh, it doesn't matter. 100

[Irvette Dauphine]

need grammar fixer!!! DX
btw, thanks~

[Junert]

It's sad

[Irvette Dauphine]

that just what you can say??
sorry about the grammar problem :(

[Junert]

You did well enough to be able to potray the sadness.

[Crimson Bayonet]

Great poem, very lovely! I enjoyed it! :D

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[That_Girl]

Sweet and romantic. :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[FrancescaX]

awww...good minus the grammar. it doesnt even sound desperate like those other girlfriends.

[Irvette Dauphine]

need grammar fixer!!! DX

[Anonymous Girl]

Really loving and touching. :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Anonymous Girl]

Its okay :)

[.]

Loved it! Romance poems are one of my favorite's! 100/100

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[.]

you're welcome

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Can't really understand much, but I could say that this is really good.
Great job!
100/100

[Irvette Dauphine]

sorry about that, i though the line is not arrange it right place
maybe, i'll fix it later
read moresorry about that, i though the line is not arrange it right place
maybe, i'll fix it later
btw, thanks~