broken promises

this is my teacher's feeling actually

i miss you

i told you when i about to leaving

please always call me or at least message me

because i have jobs

and i cant always beside you

but, why you didn't call me?

why you didn't message me??

i ask you why

then you said you cant because you have problems

i want to know it, share to me, maybe i cloud help

but you said that we shouldn't talk about it

i know, maybe your problems make me worried

but, you know what

i already worried to know that you have problems

and you don't want to share it to me

so, i wont to disturb you

i wont to send you message anymore

it's like we are in stage of cool-off

you know what, i cant stay at that situation

but, that you want

so, what can i do?

i don't want to put myself into shame

so even if i don't want to, i'll do it

you know, you broke your promise

you said that you always call me or at least message me

and don't hidden the truth, because i am is your girlfriend

but, you wont to tell me

what the used of me as your girlfriend?

i can help you, can't i??

Author's Note

sorry if this little bit mess
and sorry about my grammar and wrong word
enjoy it~

Reviews

[Fang]

I think it's sweet

[Castonovia]

Besides the grammar this poem is quite emotion, brimmed full with feelings and frustration from the heart ;) Broken promises... very sad yet entirely nice job!!!

[Irvette Dauphine]

thank~

[Colleen a Bean]

wow sad but very poetic u did a great job expressing yourself.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Colleen a Bean]

You're welcome

[RachelReaper]

I did enjoy it :) I can feel the frustration as you describe knowing that someone has a problem, but they won't open up about it. Very nicely done.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Ruby]

that is so good :) 100/100

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Ruby]

Your welcome :)

[lynne]

Very good work :) I really enjoyed it, and the emotion in this is great :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[The dark story]

nice theme....i like it excluding the grammar.....but you know what.i can see improvement in your grammar...that seems really pleasing....keep working like this and i'm sure you'll become a great writer in future.all the best......

[Irvette Dauphine]

Yea.. I'll do my best to improve my grammar more..
And thanks, you give me more hope to not surrender to trying.. :)

[Love Demon]

Sweetheart, you only need one question mark, not 2.
Tho this is really sad and amazing. I think you did a wonderful job :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

haha.. too much question marks, eh?
btw, thanks~

[Love Demon]

I can help you edit it if you want?

[Irvette Dauphine]

edit the grammar, that what i need ;)

[Rhianne Ney]

wow... so you already have a boyfriend... anyway this is inspiring...
I ignored the grammar since it's understandable even without the write words... I'm wrong it's not the grammar but the spelling that is wrong here anyway it's great just write freely the way you can express yourself more... (:

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~
btw, this is not my feeling, have read the description??

[Rhianne Ney]

uhh... sorry):

[Irvette Dauphine]

it's ok :)

[Gothic Girl]

this is quite interesting. i understand well how this feeling is.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~