just silent

about my feeling at my school today

I receive so many mocking glances

Always the same, day in and day out

Sometimes, I can't take it anymore

On the outside,

You see I'm silent and don't care

But inside,

I am crying out

It's always the same

In the end, I try to calm myself

With the sounds of music

Maybe I could mock you as well

However, you have friends

I don't

and you work together 

I don't

Maybe I can have my friend

To calm you down

Or my teachers

To punish you

but, i don't do that

because you have your own life

and i have my own life

i just think that's my challenge

and i must survive with that

i always receive what you say

and don't say anything

if you want to see me angry

you can't

if you want to see me cry

you can't

if you want to see me surrender

you can't

because you already push me

to make me don't care 

what you say to mocking me

but still

that just outside

in inside i am cry out loud

Author's Note

still fix the grammar problem :/

Reviews

[Astro MacGuffin]

Poetry is an important tool in shaping yourself as a young, thoughtful person. just remember to find things to celebrate, and celebrate them the way a poet should: celebrate the thing, celebrate your celebration of the thing, and celebrate your unique mental lens and its capacity to see cause for celebration.

[Irvette Dauphine]

i'll note it.. thank you very much..

[Love Demon]

I know how it feels getting bullied, it happened to me a few times.
I loved your poem. It was greatly written.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Crimson Bayonet]

Brilliant poem. I often feel like this too sometimes.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[corvus]

Well written =)

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Junert]

Very little grammer mistake and a poem that potrays most high schoolers cause of sadness.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~
yea, that very true..

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

I know how it feels to be bullied :(
I loved your poem. It shows the emotions and it has a good flow of words.
Great job!
100/100

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[:-)]

I reeeeally like this poem. I take it as having to do with bullying, right? Though I'm not bullied very often, and when I am being bullied I really don't care, I could feel the determination in this poem.

My favorite part was:
if you want to see me angry
you can't
if you want to see me cry
you can't
if you want to see me surrender
you can't

But I recommend changing can't to won't on all of those.

:) Good job!

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~
and i still fix it to make better :/
btw, i bullied slowly to make me dont realized it, but i knew it!!

[:-)]

Aww... Being bullied isn't fun, I know... :(

[Irvette Dauphine]

yea.. :(

[Irvette Dauphine]

"if you want to see me angry
you can't
if you want to see me cry
you can't
if you want to see me surrender
you can't"

i want to make rhyme, but just that what i can do..

[:-)]

I don't think i can help there.. I'm not too great at rhyming.

[Irvette Dauphine]

that's okay..

[:-)]

Yeah... Sorry. How about 'until the day I die'? That is all I can think of...

[Irvette Dauphine]

hmmm.. i just 3 years at there and i'll go away from them
this is my last year..

[:-)]

Well, that's good!