just silent

about my feeling at my school today

I receive so many mocking glances

Always the same, day in and day out

Sometimes, I can't take it anymore

On the outside,

You see I'm silent and don't care

But inside,

I am crying out

It's always the same

In the end, I try to calm myself

With the sounds of music

Maybe I could mock you as well

However, you have friends

I don't

and you work together 

I don't

Maybe I can have my friend

To calm you down

Or my teachers

To punish you

but, i don't do that

because you have your own life

and i have my own life

i just think that's my challenge

and i must survive with that

i always receive what you say

and don't say anything

if you want to see me angry

you can't

if you want to see me cry

you can't

if you want to see me surrender

you can't

because you already push me

to make me don't care 

what you say to mocking me

but still

that just outside

in inside i am cry out loud

Author's Note

still fix the grammar problem :/

Reviews

[Astro MacGuffin]

Poetry is an important tool in shaping yourself as a young, thoughtful person. just remember to find things to celebrate, and celebrate them the way a poet should: celebrate the thing, celebrate your celebration of the thing, and celebrate your unique mental lens and its capacity to see cause for celebration.

[Irvette Dauphine]

i'll note it.. thank you very much..

[lynne]

This describes the exact same feeling that I felt, back in the dark days when I was being bullied. This is an excellent write, because I'm sure many people can relate to it, and it was very well executed :3 Keep up the good work :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

thank you so much :)

[Tattered Teddy]

How sad, can relate. Especially this line;
"On the outside,
You see I'm silent and don't care
But inside,
I am crying out"

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[PurpleQuartz]

I think this poem was really good!! And I know lots of people can relate to it

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

This is very nice as I've also know what it's like to be bullied. You have shown in this poem strength which is positive. It's really hard being alone and being silent, at what cost? Their satisfaction? No

You have brought your thoughts to empower that you are not to give them the satisfaction they do not deserve :)

I will not say that you should overlook grammar but I felt as though these piece impacted me as the reader quite strongly

Please keep writing

[Irvette Dauphine]

i still improve my grammar :)
btw, thanks~

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

np :D btw it will improve through time

[.]

Expresses someones feelings and very touching. Keep writing! 100/100

[Irvette Dauphine]

this is my feeling :)
thanks~

[.]

you're welcome

[RachelReaper]

Defiance is radiated throughout this poem, and that's my favorite part about it: your tone. (however, if I were you, I would say to kick the guy or girl's troublesome a*s) This poem kept my attention and made me want to keep reading it through to the end.

[Irvette Dauphine]

haha.. thanks~

[Dominique]

That is a wonderful and if you don't care anymore, they won't annoy you anymore. But this is a wonderful poem. Great write.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[TrinityHawk]

This is great. I can relate to what you wrote. I was that kid who was pushed and bullied. I never let them see me cry outwardly but inwardly I cried out ... I still go through phrases of feeling like that even now at the age of 45. I is called flash backs from past memories. It envolkes memories and emotions, that makes it well writen.

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks :)

[Rhianne Ney]

It happens to me all the time... it's alright you did have grammar problems but that wont stop you from writing people shouldn't always judge a writing by its grammar well slightly if some wrong grammars made it misunderstandable... But in your writing the meaning is really visible so it's okay... (;

[Irvette Dauphine]

okay.. thanks anyway.. :)

[Weeping Willow]

I don't feel like this much but it's good to remind me that many of my frined will go thought this. Because my friends may listen to the bullies but i never do, anyway good work.

[Irvette Dauphine]

yea.. it always happen to high school student..
thanks~