prologue

this is where it all happen..

there's a peace family that have twin sons, the name is theo and aray. aray is older than theo. aray has dark blue with purple stripped hair and has greyish dark blue eyes. theo has blonde with brownish orange stripped hair and has light brown eyes. they grew together with opposite characteristic. theo is clever, diligent, kind, friendly, and respectful to everyone, meanwhile aray is lazy, stubborn, selfish, and dislike if he seen theo is always get many friend. 

when they both age is 15, they are chosen to be angel. unfortunately, the angel that meet them is wrong. the light angel meet with aray and get him to the light angel test and the night angel meet with theo and get him to the night angel. strangely, they pass the test and being an angel.

theo, the good boy, must be a night angel and he must steal somethings or kidnap someone or kill someone. aray, the bad boy, must be a light angel and he must to keep the peaceful and justice. they feel that they get terrible curse, yea because the get the wrong curse.

this is their stories...

Reviews

[FrancescaX]

the grammar made it difficult...yes. my advice is to use microsoft word and then transfer it to the cafe.
But i like the irony of what the boys get.
it makes for a good story.

[Irvette Dauphine]

huh.. need grammar fixer!!
and from microsoft word it make all capitalize, thanks :)

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

I'd be a liar if the grammar shouldn't matter but it's wonderful how you can express your thoughts so clearly even with struggles in the language. Try and double check your verb tenses and others.

Don't worry so much though, I encounter a lot of writers with troubles with the English language. It's nice that you are staying positive and being open to suggestions. Just ask if you need help.

Interesting so far :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

actually i really need helps.. can you help me??

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Of course and happy too :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

message me then :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

ooooo i like how u made it so that the opposite characteristics clash with their natural beliefs that will create a great inner struggle :3 i look forward to reading more Keep it up i'm sure ur english wil get better :3

[Irvette Dauphine]

they will work depends on their hearts :)
btw, thanks~

[Tsukin Archangel]

np :3 and i c~

[Serenity Faith]

Oh I loved the idea you have formed here. It's not like the normal cliche' dark and light. This definitely has a twist. I can't wait to read their stories! ^_^

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Denis K.]

Nice prologue! I'll be waiting for the next chapter OwO

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~
i still working on it :)

[Rhianne Ney]

The proper capitalization of words and ... Some 'thes' should be they and proper use of nouns and some tenses. Sorry to criticize it this way... The prologue is interesting though bad boy should be good and good boy should be bad... It is fun to be read but a lot of grammar errors... It's alright still and understandable it didn't really mess up your story... It was clear

[Irvette Dauphine]

it's okay.. i'll fix it...
btw thanks~

[Rhianne Ney]

you're always welcome

[Weeping Willow]

it's fine but love your prologue

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Irvette Dauphine]

i already give more description :)

[Ruby]

it's really good but it needs to be fixed a little bit. :) great work!

[Irvette Dauphine]

i'll put more description later..
btw, thanks~

[Ruby]

our welcome :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

I am not at my laptop, that why i cant fix it DX

[Ruby]

ok

[Irvette Dauphine]

i already give more description :)

[RachelReaper]

Interesting to write it in this format, short and to the point. I have to admit I kind of like this format... it doesn't have fifty thousand unnecessary details. It tells you what you need to know.

[Irvette Dauphine]

haha..
thanks~

[Irvette Dauphine]

i already give more description :)