kidnapping after kidnapping

there two men that from pyromancer class, wear a fiery red robe is the symbol of pyromancer, crossing the forest to find kids that get lost from their parents. they find kid in forest because it easy to kidnap them. 

they can fell rune power and want to know who use that, they follow their inscting. suddenly the power is stop, but they very close. they go to where is the power from and they found a little girl that laying on ground. the grounds and trees around her is damaged by hurricane and some trees get burn. they think she is the correct person and they take her to their base and meet with their boss.

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hanii wake up at very dark room. her head very dizzy and feel little exhaustion. she is trying to stand up but ended with sit on the floor.

"huh.. where am i? the last things that i remember i still in the middle of forest. how i ended be in here?" hanii said while look around. "very dark here.. i even cant see my hand" 

"do that little girl wake up? very dark there, but i cant let she free or i get killed" hanii can read the prison keeper's mind in front her room's door "this room is cant damaged by anythings and in there very dark. i wonder how she will survive"

"the prison keeper infront of the door of this room.. he said this room is cant damaged? okay i'll use this room to training"

hanii trying to stand up again and now she can. she take a deep breath and then trying to relax to control emotional. she focus to her heart and believe to her power. there a rune around her body and she can feel that. hanii think that she will did it easily, but ended up with electrocute herself. she is fallen down and recover herself, dont know how she did it! but, hanii doesn't realize that.

"okay, it's not easy as it seems. maybe there somethings wrong" said hanii lying on the floor and thinking "hmmm... they use their sword to align their rune. but, i dont have weapon. hmmmm..." still thinking "aha!" she suddenly sit "my hand! my weapon is my hand!!" stand up "okay lets start again"

now, she do that again. take a deep breath, focus to her heart and her power, make rune, and release thunder or lightning. she get fail several time, but she believe what she do it already right, she just cant to align it. she trying again and again, until she exhaustion.

"hold on.. i can do it!" she trying again and now she make it. there a lightning that crush the wall!

"i did it! horray!!" hanii throw herself to the floor "ouch! i really too excited" said hanii trying to rest on the cold floor

while she rest, dont know how she know about the room where she was in now. she know how big is the room and there a drink and fruits at plate near the door.

"a drinks and fruits? very kind! that what i need" said hanii and then she go to where the drinks and fruit is and enjoy them.

"the drink is not fresh anymore and the several fruits rot, but its okay"

hanii sitting, leaning on the door and learn the outside. she found there more prison keepers and this is the dungeon. while she learn how to escape, there two people that use pyromancer suits that headed to her room.

"hey, are you already woke up?" the one of the man ask to hanii

"..."

"answer me!!"

"yeah.."

"good" hanii can hear that they unlock her room

"dont escape or trying to agaisnt us. now use these handcuffs and follow us" said the man while use his rune "come on, fast or i'll burn you"

"..." hanii use the handcuffs and follow them.

they lead her to the lab room. hanii forced to the incubator and she is injected by a man that wear lab suit. hanii just silent and follow that. she just believe that she will save. 

"okay, the process is complete" the lab man said "you two just leave this room"

"okay" the two men that he mentioned go to outside

"now you, just relax" said the lab men and push a button

the incubator is fulled by gasses that make hanii fell drowsy and then she is sleep.

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the lab men check the little girl already sleep or not, 'yes, she is sleep', and then prepare the machine that will always control the little girl body balance. put the cable here put there cable there and so much to do and dont forget to tie up her body. after he finish he just left the little girl and he go to report.

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hanii suddenly wake up because her body is very hurt like someone burn her body while stabbing her with a pointy stick. 'this is hurt, very hurt' said hanii open her eyes and see that she is tied up with so many cable here and there. 'i am tied up and my body burn! what the hell they are doing to me?' she trying to recover the hurt with her rune and it works!

hanii trying to relax and focus. she is check outside and find the way out. the room is covered by anti rune from outside, she cant check outside. she just can check the room that she in. 'in this room, there's so many little kid just same like me, tied up and get hurt, what this lab belong to?'

a day and a day, hanii must fell the hurt and exhaustion, there a kid that get recovering from the lab man because the kid is have the power and he is get sign from them. hanii dont want to get sign from them, so if she had the power, she will go from here, no matter what happen next. 

so hanii waiting until the lab man said that she will get sign from them. that just a week ago from the day that the kid leaving, that mean less than two week she is in incubator 'tomorrow, the lab man confuse why i can get the power faster than the other kid, i dont care' said hanii 'now, i must go from here. the problem, how to open this tie?' hanii trying to burn that by little fire with her power from pyromancer, the result the giant fire that almost burn herself.

'i still cant control this' hanii run as fast as she can to avoid the soldier that chase her because they are hear the intruder bell is ringing. they get far away from hanii and get lost. they wondered where is she and they scares to report that they lost her.

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after hanii can run from pyromancer clan, she is get exhaustion and fainted. she is found by another evil/dark clan and get the same event. while she is in prison, she practicing her power that she get from previous clan. she not hungry because sometimes she can eat some fruits at forest or drink fresh water at river and sometimes she eat and drink at prison if the food and the drink is good. she can run away safely, but sometimes she got by soldiers and she must use her power to run away.

after a half year, she is found by the good clan. and everything changed, she is get adequate and well-trained trainer that make her power better and well-controlled.

Author's Note

okay, my grammar mess again :P
what a long chapter.. sorry, i too serious to write this chapter
I still fix it..

Reviews

[FrancescaX]

what is 'inscting'? do you mean 'instinct'?
describe these events more. i dont like the jumpy nature. is there a way to tell us more or write in such a way that people dont ask questions when they read it?

[Irvette Dauphine]

i'll fix it..
if i have much time, i will go from here for awhile :(

[Knight in Armor]

You have a few grammar errors again. First, the sentences, "there two men that from pyromancer class, wear a fiery red robe is the symbol of pyromancer, crossing the forest to find kids that get lost from their parents. they find kid in forest because it easy to kidnap them" feel like they should read, "There were two men from the pyromancer class. They were wearing fiery red robes because that is the symbol for pyromancer. The men were crossing the forest to find kids that had gotten lost."
Similarly, the lines, "they can fell rune power and want to know who use that, they follow their inscting. suddenly the power is stop, but they very close" feel like they should read, "They felt rune power and wanted to know who was using it. They followed their instincts. The power stopped, but they felt that it was very close."
If you fix these and other similar errors, like tense slips and double verbs, this will be another lovely installment.

[Irvette Dauphine]

okay.. i'll fix it later..
thanks~

[icerhex]

This is getting better and better, don't worry about having mistakes evereyone makes them. Your awesome story still shines through. :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[ewest1220]

There we go! Ideas are starting to click into place, still some grammar errors I see. If you read it out loud you'll catch them right off the bat! Great job!

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~
i'll do my best to fix my grammar and fix my books..

[ewest1220]

Hey now the idea is fantastic! Technical errors are common and while they need to be fixed they don't detract from your writings potential! Keep at it this'll be great!

[Irvette Dauphine]

yea.. i still continue this book until 4 books :D
i already have the storyline, i just need to make the story expanded

[Irvette Dauphine]

please check my blog if you want to know the character and the synopsis oh my books..

[ewest1220]

I'll so that :)

[Hatchling]

I love this :D my spelling can be alittle of ay times too, so you are not alone

[Hatchling]

*at

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~
i glad i am not alone :D

[Hatchling]

:)