prologue

There a little orphanage in border village and town near the forest. the orphanage look like an old building that have 3 floors and comfort to stay. the building is little higher to avoid flooding due to heavy rains that often occur in this area. so, there a stair in front of the door.

There's a girl that is sitting on a stair in front the door, her name is Hanii. She had semi brown and gold hair and she had beautiful brown eyes. She is nine years old, her zodiac sign is a leo and she has a charm around her neck that has the leo sign. Hanii is an exceptionally talented girl, not only is she smart but also a master in Karate and being a leader seems to come naturally for her. But the problem, she is too quiet and too mature at her age.

The bell rings, signaling that it's lunch time. Hanii gets into the kitchen, she gets her lunch, including a drink. She walks into the dining room, where almost all the other kids are already eating and talking. She goes to her chair, pulls it out and sits, and begins the daily routine of eating slowly, but at the same time, quickly, last thing she does is opens the warm water bottle sitting on the corner of her tray. 

She quickly runs to her room after she finishes her meal, still clutching her water bottle. She changes into her practice clothing so she can go to the woods behind the orphanage and work hard on her martial arts. 

When she reaches the forest, however, she hears rumbling. Curious as to where the sound came from she follows the odd noise. She stops at two men, fighting, with an odd power, known as the power of Rune. Hanii was standing by in amazement, when one of the men gets hurt badly, this is when Hanii stops being dazzled by the so-called-fictional power.

The attacker escapes, but Hanii doesn't care. She runs to help the man, but just as he is about to die he thanks Hanii by giving his power to her. 

Hanii doesn't realize by that power she will become other people.

Author's Note

i have trouble with grammar, so if you found mistakes, please tell me.
this is my first book..
btw thanks to fix my grammar..
enjoy it~

Reviews

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Sounds good!

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks~

[Melody]

Grammar has improved...It has definantly improved. It could go somewhere. :)

[Irvette Dauphine]

please check the next chapter..

[Irvette Dauphine]

thanks for your help to fix my grammar

[Timeless-Chan]

this still seems like a summary. when you write you want to try and tell it in a different perspective then the author. if you are going for third person try to start off with maybe discribing the orphanage and then go into the how hanii is sitting on the steps. also to me it'd be better if you didn't jump right into telling everything about her. save things for later on in the story. just say a few important things in the beginning and then as the story progresses you can add more information.

[Irvette Dauphine]

i just make this prologue for introduce the main character..
and yea i must to describe the orphanage..
thanks~

[Irvette Dauphine]

what do you think now?

[Timeless-Chan]

better:) i'll message you:)

[Irvette Dauphine]

please check the next chapter..