Gravity of Love

When the love falls...

One day, an apple fell on Genius inkling
        it broke off the clandestine, escaped through time...

...like the Apple of Newton


....Over the cosmos of a lightly being, the Sun on stagnancy the radiance of its waves,
        and Alas!, it crafted life on Mother Earth.

....The spider tree stood still with a lone leaf on the farthest top of its branches,
and in time it will make its sweet lonely return on Spring Waltz April

....Then quenched the flaming wrath of the dessert.

....The White Dragon slumbered for 100 years on the highest ranges,
until a strange echolalia awaken its deadly decline.

....Into the caves of earth, and each drop made swords sharper.

....Bewildered under the Ocean floor,
        the stars that fell made the deepest trenches.

....Creatures begin to burgeon, like the seed growing over tamed soil,
        descent as a fertilized grain... you were conceived...


In time, you stood with me barefooted, pulled in the middle ... a perfect human,
        the gravity of love made its notion to me that


I fell

...like the waves of Sun
...like a falling leaf
...like the rain
...like the avalanche
...like the stalactites
...like the falling stars
...like an ovum

in love.

Reviews

[Dane Osborne]

This was very cool. Impressive use of imagery and amazing flow. Some amazing lines here:
....The White Dragon slumbered for 100 years on the highest ranges,
until a strange echolalia awaken its deadly decline.

....Over the cosmos of a lightly being, the Sun on stagnancy the radiance of its waves,
and Alas!, it crafted life on Mother Earth.

....The spider tree stood still with a lone leaf on the farthest top of its branches,
and in time it will make its sweet lonely return on Spring Waltz April


To me this had a strong blakean feel in the musicality of the rythm and the way you practially create your own hallucinatory world with its own mythology. Well done.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very nice. There is nothing like the feeling of falling in love. That is one of the reasons that I try to fall in love with a new girl at least two or three times per week. Lol.

Great write!

-Gabe

[Amanda]

beautifully written...the comparisons are superb. i love this piece!

good job!

Amanda = ))))

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful words to express such a beautiful feeling...thank you for sharing it...just wonderful.
Light,
Siddartha

[Maxinne Marie]

Love it! Remember, the "in love" line is my idea. ;) Hehe! I'll post a real review later. For now, I have to study these disorders of the esophagus lesson. Help!! God bless us on our exams tomorrow. waaaah..

[Antony]

this is absolutely beautiful in all that it says, Gods creation and from the rib of Adam she is created and the fall begins. What a beautiful way to describe, falling in love. Your style is very unique.
Antony

[Melody P-]

this is great! your style of writting so different yet it flows with ease:) I love your concept of having fallen love** your closing, very powerful;)

[Fran Marie]

I fell

...like the waves of Sun
...like the rain
...like the stalactites
...like the falling stars
...like an ovum

in love.

A lovely piece deeply expressed in beautiful poetuc verse~THanks for sharing~Fran Marie

[Pinky]

Yeppers!! awesome 2 thumbs up!

[Legion]

Holy *&(#! I think this is the best poem I have ever read. That is including my own. This was so perfect and beautiful. I wish I had written it. Going in my favorites. Two thumbs up and a standing ovation! Hope this makes the top writers page.