Gravity of Love

When the love falls...

One day, an apple fell on Genius inkling
        it broke off the clandestine, escaped through time...

...like the Apple of Newton


....Over the cosmos of a lightly being, the Sun on stagnancy the radiance of its waves,
        and Alas!, it crafted life on Mother Earth.

....The spider tree stood still with a lone leaf on the farthest top of its branches,
and in time it will make its sweet lonely return on Spring Waltz April

....Then quenched the flaming wrath of the dessert.

....The White Dragon slumbered for 100 years on the highest ranges,
until a strange echolalia awaken its deadly decline.

....Into the caves of earth, and each drop made swords sharper.

....Bewildered under the Ocean floor,
        the stars that fell made the deepest trenches.

....Creatures begin to burgeon, like the seed growing over tamed soil,
        descent as a fertilized grain... you were conceived...


In time, you stood with me barefooted, pulled in the middle ... a perfect human,
        the gravity of love made its notion to me that


I fell

...like the waves of Sun
...like a falling leaf
...like the rain
...like the avalanche
...like the stalactites
...like the falling stars
...like an ovum

in love.

Reviews

[Dane Osborne]

This was very cool. Impressive use of imagery and amazing flow. Some amazing lines here:
....The White Dragon slumbered for 100 years on the highest ranges,
until a strange echolalia awaken its deadly decline.

....Over the cosmos of a lightly being, the Sun on stagnancy the radiance of its waves,
and Alas!, it crafted life on Mother Earth.

....The spider tree stood still with a lone leaf on the farthest top of its branches,
and in time it will make its sweet lonely return on Spring Waltz April


To me this had a strong blakean feel in the musicality of the rythm and the way you practially create your own hallucinatory world with its own mythology. Well done.

[Emily B]

Beautifully romantic.

[Damien Dsoul]

Tons of similies, hisorical and astrological allusions, juxtaposed into forming an infinite metaphor for Love.

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

i am impressed. i love your format. very intriguing to the eye. the last stanza is my favorite. your words go straight to the heart

[Angel Bird]

This is High-Level-Poetry!!! It's beautiful!

[Kitty]

I like the way you formed this poem. It has such a pure flow to it. I like the last bit the most:

"I fell
...like the waves of Sun
...like a falling leaf
...like the rain
...like the avalanche
...like the stalactites
...like the falling stars
...like an ovum
in love."

Great job!!!!

Josie

[Kitty]

Wonderfully written. It flowed so well.
Love indeed pulls you in even when you don't have plans to get into it.

well written.

Thanks to Legion who recommended this.

-Joy

[SM Davis]

stunning!

[Andromeda]

beautiful

[Seven]

Soooooo beautiful. Wish it had been written for me :)

[Tania Leigh]

lol, I'm still chuckling at Legion's review :-)

I love the title, I love the format, the story, and every similie at the end....a wonderful piece!