Kiss Me When the Rain Falls

You were running with your night gown on
The silky smooth of it easily flown by the wind
So deep, and doesn�t clash with the blossoming breast.
Barefooted;
You smiled from a far
Making paths from the ominous ambiance
Above, the starlight illuminates your being,
As your hair glistens with satisfaction
Seeing me again touch every strands of it

You were inches from me
Suddenly,
Clasp of thunder embraces the humid air
The trees were deafening
Gushed by the cool wind
Finally the rain falls
You stopped, had gazed upon the sky;
I held you through my reach.
Still beguiled by an amazement
You keep your eyes steady,
Calm;
Unknowingly, your lips and mine�
Touched
Ambiguously

Until the rain falls
You�ll never know.
I still loved you�
Since, you have gone
Repressed me�
Flooded me
On that very night

Reviews

[Valerie Jones]

This poem expresses such delightful emotions, it touches deep fibers within the reader.

There are a few little things that could help it a little, but that don't take away at all the beauty of the message.

"a far" did you mean afar?
"every strands" if you are using every, it should be "strand"

In the following lines, you are creating an abrupt change without any transition, from past to present. I would suggest keeping them in the past, as you seem to be recollecting these memories.
"thunder embraces" embraced
"the rain falls" fell
"You keep your eyes" kept

The last stanza again, seems to shift from one tense to the next, making the thought confusing.

"Until the rain falls
You�ll never know.
I still loved you�.
Since, you have gone
Repressed me�
Flooded me
On that very night"

How about playing with it a little? Maybe:

I still loved you...
You'll never know
Until the rain falls again.
Ever since, gone, you've
Repressed me
Flooded me
from that very night on.

Just my two cents, hope it helps. Great work!

[Tabitha Kaufman]

This is very beautifuly written. You made me smile......

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

you make beautiful poetry