The Season of Smoky Waters

New take on an old rhyme

“The Season of Smoky Waters”

 

Red sky at night

Such a violent sight

In the season of smoky waters

 

Red sky at morn

Earns a broken heart’s scorn

In the icy cold chill of the night

 

Red sky all along

Not a myth, not a song

When you're the one living on Mars

 

Author's Note

This was originally only the first two stanzas

Reviews

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Very well done. I think it has good wording all comes together.

On Mars, not a bad ending


Red sky all along

Not a myth, not a song

When you are living on Mars


I have to have the title first before I write. Let me give you a word and you can run with it. See what you can do by using the name of your state. Check my West Virginia Smiles. I will give Smoky Waters a try.

Keep up the good work. I'm going to check out some of your other writings.

You did a good job.

[Desert Dreamer]

Love the image of red sky...I kept hearing the lyrics "Smoke on the water, fire in the sky..." due to the title of the poem, which added to the vision I saw from reading your words. I wonder what living under a Mars sky would be like.