mental alchemy

I died in the details of today.
My mind could not give birth
to tomorrow's potential.
Your words drifted to my ears,
expanded my awareness,
contracted my fears.
A pregnant pause -
I named her Hope.
 

Reviews

[R J Askew]

title intrigues, though not as much as Cory The Cop...but it got me in. The first line i think is great. I don't need any more than that. I quite like the outcome of the pregnant pause, but not as much as the first line which will stick with me awhile.

[Julian]

Always worth pausing for "hope".
"My mind could not give birth
to tomorrow's potential. "
I love that line...cleverly constructed and enjoyed this poem. Julian :)

[Melissa M.]

Interesting, and thought provoking. A good read, I like it a lot.

[B. Lapinski]

a pregnant pause...always hate air like that. nicely written...again

[Kristina Moulaison]

Well said. I like this alot.