Caress my ego

 

 

 

Complete me with a touch

My persona, caressed

Insignificant lust

Sexually expressed

 

A yearning desire

Awaiting an embrace

Need to be admired

Deficiency replaced

 

Just animalism

A need to be fulfilled

Feeding narcissism

A tantalizing thrill

 

A hallow connection

To remedy this hole

Shallow stimulation

Bring life to a dead soul

 

For passions just a fuel

Nourishing vanity

Egotistical tool

Eases insecurity

 

Energy intertwined

A physical pleasure

Satisfies mortal minds

Just an empty gesture

 

Consumption and deceit

In the end the self’s bruised

In the end incomplete

The ego drained and used

Author's Note

ok... here we go... life in a nut shell from pink.... Its about shallow stimulation... dead meaningless conversation...seeing through the worlds bullshit lead me to write this... I am being vague.... i want u to read and learn.... maybe time alone reading a book or writing or bettering urself is better thn trivial comunication.

Reviews

[Arlen]

I like poems about Ego, it's our biggest obstacle against our own self realization.

[Jack Diamond]

Now this I can really relate too!
I'm not sure if I took it the way you meant or not but to me it was about feeling incomplete and discontent with one's self.
"A yearning desire awaiting an embrece
A need to be admired deficency replaced"

These lines really speak to me since I can't seem to be happy if I don't have someone telling me I'm handsom and that I'm a nice guy. I need to put shallow patches on my self esteem made out of pointless, shwllow relationships. But now I'm going on about myself and I'm sure that's prorbably not even what you meant by the poem. None the less though a very great read.
Nicely done : )

[Mr Whiskers]

I really do dig this. It's just 'so' in such a way...I find myself missing the deep linking conversations I used to get, feeling actually dulled down by the clueless chatter and the surrounding space filled with everyone seemingly wanting only the skin-to-skin contact they can glean from each other. You reach out to that and show them it means nothing if it comes foremost.

[Sarah]

Okay, this was amazing. I'm jealous of your skills. XD Your rhyming was excellent, the short lines worked really well, this was dark and erotic, and really really well written. GREAT JOB! ^_^

[JenLyn]

I like the way you look at ordinary things and make them a bit bizarre.

[Enigma]

Wow! That was a very well-thought out piece. The words fitted perfectly and the rhymes came naturally I guess (or did u have to work hard to make it sound so perfect? lol..)
Loved it; it felt intricate and exotic, know what I mean, lol!! :)

[Brandon]

I like this one, its a little different from norm as far as yours go. Great job.

[Wolfwind Words]

I couldn't agree with you more Pink! Way to many useless and meaningless stimulations in the world. Get ride of the TV, get rid of Hollywood, and we might stand a better chance of survival in the years to come.

A really great piece with a lot of good strong images and meanings.

Great Ink!
Aaron

[SM Davis]

Energy intertwined
A physical pleasure
Satisfies mortal minds
Just an empty gesture

the above was my favorite part. the meter is good, the message sound and strong.

[peacefrog]

im feeling it!