heal

 

The root snapped away

The Sacral is cursed

Solar plexus decayed

The heart hurts the worst

 

Throat can not speak

Third eye wont listen

Crown confused and weak

The soul longs to glisten

Author's Note

This is not about me... this is how i see most of humanity... this is the 1st from my 4th comp book.... and its open... i just nroke a writers block... i think tht the form is almost perfect and the flow is there... its short and simple not to confuse i want the point to come out... its about finding oneness... connecting....

Reviews

[Emily]

Hey, I found you! Cool poem. I dig the third eye and crown references. Also going through some of your past reviews on this one I stumbled across your response -- "healing the soul from this human disease" -- What an amazingly true point! I have always thought it to be that we have to overcome this Ego enveloped Human condition. Right on Allison! I am looking forward to reading the rest of your art :)

[Summers Under The Old O..]

The flow is quite nice. It is short, simple, and effectively gets your message across, as you mentioned. I like how you said this is how you view most of humanity, it puts an interesting spin on the poem, in my opinion. I especially like the last line "The soul longs to glisten", as if those who are stuck in their problems at least subconsciously want to better themselves.

-Summer

[Sarah]

Very short, almost feels incomplete, but perhaps that's because I was expecting it to be longer, lol. Anyway, I love your use of language, you always come up with some interesting ideas and words. Great job. :)

[Pakino]

Sorry for the very very very very very very late post. I have been kinda inactive and post my fiction story once a month but ill catch up and do the reviews.

For this one I like the how you used the word "crown". And the ending is great I find it is not very dismal but full of hope at the end. Which I like typically.

[Brandon]

Wow, I really like this. Short and too the point. Nicely done.

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

This is interesting and it sounds like you may be suffering from a dose of writers block, i still haven't managed to locate my third eye yet,nice play on words here and my tongue is a little twisted and as dry as a sahara flipflop.

[larryb]

Nice write Pinky, i liked the flow and is cleverly put together

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

Very nice

[Wolfwind Words]

A poignant piece of Chakral breakdown. Like a stairway only going down, each line took the reader towards the bottom. I like your wording and flow of this piece.... Now...how do we put the pieces back together so the soul will shine? :)

Nice piece to start a compilation.

Aaron Wolfie Maycroft

[Pinky]

I am proud of this and i am looking to nu inspiration such as healing the soul while being in tis body.. in my 4th comp book is going to be mostly about finding oneness... of course i am sure i will get pissed and write a few rants... but healing is more important... because its something everyone cud use a lil help on.... healing the soul from this human disease