limited

 

 

 

Built in anxiety

Immobilized with fear

Life in obscurity

longing to disappear

 

Guarded behind your wall

Protected, your safe place

Never living at all

Your potential disgraced

 

The only true failure

Is not to even try

Life can be a treasure

Don’t let it pass you bye

Author's Note

About a dear close friend of mine... i care and worry about him! I can only hope one day he breaks the wall down.... i think it works!

Reviews

[angelina neves]

Uau! It is very beautiful and so true...
It is very sad to see so many beautiful people imprisioned inside the walls they construct themselves and let dry and die all the potential they have...
afraid? ... but, as you say so well, with no need to be as: "The only true failure /Is not to even try/ Life can be a treasure/ Don't let it pass you bye" - and we are all here just trying! No one can say "I failed" because life is about living the best we can and think it is good for us...
wonderful!

[NCPanthersgurl]

This is really well written. It's simple, and close to the point, but the message is really well portrayed.

[CJ]

yea its good. I understand it completely. full of truths. most people let life pass them by its very sad.

[thecoolone52]

nice authors note..... / poem/........... i liked the last stanza it had some roxy flare to it!

[larryb]

Well done Pinky...you have proved that size does not matter.........

[Brandon]

Short , sweet and nicely done.

[James Takeo Panton]

I liked this!
Very thought-provoking and insightful

Also, was the misspelling of "bye" (by?) intentional? (I hope so, as I always enjoy a play on words!)

[Sandra K]

I thank you for sending this my way. This is a beautiful poem, that means alot and i will take that into count. I am saving it, so i can look back on it, when i start to feel low ( It happens often nowadays). In just a few words, you encourage me to change my view on life. Thank you for this beautiful poem!

Sandra K!

[Enigma]

Well, I hope the same for him. It's a very deep and thought provoking poem. I think everyone should read it!!
It's short, simple and to the point. Very effective in conveying the message...
Well written...Great Job!!

[L.G. Knight]

Very sweet short poem with a very strong very timeless message.... Well done! By the way that was great rhyming and that rhythm was just FABULOUS... nicely done indeed it flowed of the tounge like a nursery school rhyme but left an impact in it wake... beautiful really...

~Frances~