lost

I am dying

Deep down inside

I am crying

Wish I could hide

 

I am floating

Down the stream

I am living

For broken dreams

 

I am alone

Lost in space

In this unknown

Empty, sad place

 

There is no trail

In barren woods

Futures bleak and pail

I’d find a way out… if I could

Author's Note

ok form is good til the last part but it flows... and makes a point... or at least i think so!

Reviews

[Joseph - Michael]

Yes, it does make some points... I mean, we all do feel like that every once in a while, so you're not alone on this one...

Anyway, it's very nice and simple, yet it's very sad and meaningful, so it's all good tho...

[Angel Bird]

Sounds very good to me the rhyme and rhythm, and also the last stanza flows nicely.
Your write has a deep and emotional essence.
I think you've done pretty good here. I like it!

[Pakino]

I can see the idea you are trying to present. The last part is fine in my opinion. Since it gives an idea of what will happen and what must be done. I do that sometimes in my poems. lol