Weighted

The worlds weight

Is dragging me down

The crude hate

Is making me drown

 

My head aches

Thinking forever

As I break

From this endeavor

 

All the stress

Soreness in my neck

Anger suppressed

My body is wrecked

 

I am drained

My stomach in knots

Worlds insane

Rancid filled with rot

 

As it runs

Anguish down my spine

Where’s the sun

Will it ever shine

 

Cement feet

My essence is bound

I’m just meat

Shackled to the ground

Reviews

[Cassandra]

Wow. Your writing is so .. powerful and emotional and provoking. This one I especially like. I really feel the weight of it all.. just pressing.

[Flow]

so many words of oppression I remember feeling that way a long time ago. Wonder write in getting us to feel your feeling of chained down. :) good expressions of the affect it has on you mental and physical.

[thecoolone52]

very artstic flow and indepth rhyme sceme for this one......... i enjoyed this poem because it shows your true feelings about the world and the bad beats youve been taking lately......... very well written..........

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

nicly written u do write very well love

[larryb]

Nicely done Pinky :)

[chris' girlfriend]

dang i know how u feel :(
great poem!!!

[Sarah]

An interesting concept - the cruelty of the world being so intense that it effects your body and ties you down. I love the symbolism in this, good job! (:

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Not everyone can rhyme that good but you did a great job! This is very well written. Great piece

[Brandon]

Very nicely done. Great flow as well.