He came to me last night

its a free thought dream

 

 

 

He came to me last night

 

He came to me

To help me see

He came to me last night

 

He never spoke

An intangible haze of smoke

He came to me last night

 

Sending thoughts of meaning

To me threw my dreaming

He came to he last night

 

I think to tell me its ok

That he never went away

He came to me last night

 

But never spoke

I understood it when I awoke

He came to me last night

 

WITHOUT WORDS EXPLAINED THAT I WILL FIND THE LIGHT

ALL I HAVE TO DO TO FIND PURPOSE IS WRITE

HE CAME TO ME LAST NIGHT

Author's Note

This is free thought... and very pure and raw... the 1st thing i wrote this morning when i woke up... yes its about a dream... i was sitting in a dark room with a tiny light and i was writing...he (my dad) was in the background when i saw his haze the light got brighter... he didnt speak at all... just sent thoughts.... its weird cuz when he 1st went all i heard was words but didnt see him... I miss him sooo much... i know this was my dad... and the way he communicated with me was like i was just a soul... idk... i am an odd free thinker...that believes in reincarnation and life between life... so... idk...or its because i was listening to zappa and he was my dad fav... and its psychological i just thought ppl might enjoy how raw and pure this is... and its a source of inspiration to me... so to alway remember it... and use the inspiration again... i am posting it here... i really dont care what ppl think about it... its just thoughts... god i miss my dad

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

hm i understand what cheshire is saying, but i guess i have to say something about that myself.

i understand when people get upset about corrections in grammar and spelling, but if not... why are we here? why are we reviewing? why should we be constructive?? unless someone clearly states "i dont want to hear your crap about spelling and grammar" then yes, i'm going to want to fix it for them. it's a matter of improving our craft - and it doesn't get improved by mere emotion.

the correction is the word "Threw" by the way - it should be "through".

but that's not to you my dear, that was in response to cheshires intense response.

but yes there's the typo... and yes it bothered me. if such things don't bother people, than that's great for them. but part of the reason that stuff matters is because there is a whole world of people out there who won't be able to enjoy the poem as much, because it won't read as well for them. and so much of our wriiting is about flow... and mishaps in grammar and spelling interrupt that flow.

::Sigh:: okay, it's too early for me to be sharing my thoughts lol

as far as THE POEM Is concerned, i really enjoyed it. the repetition of "he came to me last night" was really well done, and you could tell, even before you shared that it was your dad, that this was aperson of great inspiration to you, and that his presence in your night was reawakenning your creative spirit... that was great. i'm sorry you miss him.

big hugs my dear. and forgive my rant (i'm sure you will lol)

hugs

[JenLyn]

Well written, it flows so nice. I love the last stanza. Great write! :)

[justjenn_2u]

How clairvoyant of a piece. I love your writings about supernatural experiences. I am always so intrigued.

Way to go! I enjoyed!

[TamerQtaish]

This is very interesting for sure, I loved reading it
I mostly loved this part:

"Sending thoughts of meaning

To me threw my dreaming

He came to he last night"

Beautifully written
All the best,
Tamer

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I have no words for this poem. Its so raw and beautiful.

[larryb]

I agree with Cai , screw a few misspelled words or grammar i enjoyed your poem, i have dreams of my parents
both of which are dead and i wake with a smile , i cry like a little girl at times i miss them both so much and im a combat vet so i understand your feelings totally ......Hugs to ya

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

who gives a damn about misspelling i hate when people complain or add it in about grammer bullshit and yes very great poem :) well written and well done dont let these low lives bring u down with their bitching about grammer its all based and written on how u feel and what u see not how u can spell

[Shadows of Sight]

Wow! other then one little mis spell in line 10. I thought it was wonderful!
The power and the essence of life flowed from these words.

I must say that everything you write gets better with each word! I like watching that journey. :)

Keep it up!