Hole

 

 

 

 

I am just tits

I am just an a*s

My mind is s**t

I am just a mass

 

I can not feel

I am just flesh

I am just a meal

Your urge refreshed

 

Just an object

I am just skin

good while erect

Just something to win

 

I am just a hole

I am just a shell

I don’t have a soul

Pleasure is why I dwell

 

TO MAKE YOU FEEL WHOLE

Author's Note

idk if i like the 1st part... let me know... i am sure a lot of women have felt like this once or twice...

Reviews

[Cassandra]

Dark.. and true. I like the honesty in this piece. The first part was good b/c it displayed your angst well and how you feel like an object and not a person w/ emotions

I am just a hole...... to make you feel whole".

Why do we do this? Sacrifice our well-being for the better of others. I wonder if men ever feel like they are just used for sex objects..

[Enigma]

The first part is great, don't worry.And the poem is a heart-felt write, an honest and true expression of emotions (dark ones to be exact).Though it doesn't make the reader feel very happy (it's a sad poem), but people can easily relate to it (as everyone have felt like that once in their life time) and can enjoy it too.
I say, it's a great write.
Well Done!!...and keep writing.

[[untitled]]

The first part is great. I have for sure felt this way before. I like the rhyming its creative.

[Bellarina]

Good =]

[Wolfwind Words]

No female should ever have to feel this way.
Men who treat women as such should take the plunge into the firey rivers of hell.

Thanks for sharing. It brings a tragic point up. that our society needs help.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

definitely have felt this way, and i'm glad you penned these thoughts. i thought the last verse was the weakest - it didn't make sense to me - the use of 'please'? didnt' seem to flow or make much sense.
but you have, obviously, a concept that we can relate to, and i like th eway you went about it in a simple and blunt way

[larryb]

Its always good to let your feelings out , good job :)

[Angel Bird]

Very raw, but you put into words the feelings women sometimes get as being just an object to use when it pleases to men.

Raw - but true to many!

[Aries]

Nice work, very raw. It sad how one can be made to feel this way, but it happens all the time...

Amazing and dark....Nice work~

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

wow powerful but dont lower yourself to society