falling

***ME AT MY PUREST**** my 1st real poem that wasn't all mushy... i was in th grade...read more below

 

 

 

Jumping off the edge of an insane world

Trying to fly

But wanting to die

Falling but never hitting

Waiting

But never finding

The ground below

Afraid to look upon one death

For one just wants to forget ones past

If one opens ones eyes the round gets near

Waiting to die is a big fear

Some people cant live a lie

Called life

So they wait by falling to die

To end a lie

Called life

 

 

Sometime in 1991

Author's Note

It is the only written work from my 1st comp book, that wasn't lost. There are a few more but they remain in my head... This is me RAW... and now its time for the story behind it. As i said i was in 5th grade... I was going threw a social anxiety thing and was paranoid that when I went into the lunch room everyone was talking shit about me... so i stopped going into the lunch room... i wud sit in the halls... a loner... and thats were i wrote this... then my mom found it thought i was sucidual and took me to a psychologist. She said it was good to get my feels out through writting... and i still do just that. I think it speaks volumes about who i am and who i grew to be... I know its not the greatest poem... but its me at my purest

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

This was truly pure! :) For writing it in 5th grade i'm impressed! I didn't start to write poetry until a fit of supressed depression during highschool.
You have this uncanny way to write poetry that touches my heart. I give you Hugs! :)
Thanks for sharing!

[Cassandra]

I actually think this is a very good poem. I feel the anxiety very strongly through it. Adolescence is one big anxiety attack and you hit the nail on the head with this. I

I like particularly the last bit " Some people cant live a lie
Called life
So they wait by falling to die
to end a lie
Called life" .. great job thanks for digging it out of the comp notebook :)

[Shadows of Sight]

If i had been there! I would have cause the wind to rattle the windows and made swirling leaves come streaming through the doors, to keep them from giving you s**t! he he! :)
Truly spoken from your heart. I like it! :)

[thecoolone52]

5th grade wow thats really gooddd......

Waiting to die is a big fear
Some people cant live a lie
Called life


so are my favorite lines of your poem........... nice job again............

[larryb]

Nice for 5th grade, i was still drooling on myself in th fifth grade :)

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

nicly done

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I like it its how i felt as a child too.