Acid Sunset

Two benches in a park face the sunset tonight,
an acid sunset.
Bright colors fill the sky like the Aurora Borealis
although we are nowhere near those ghostly lights.

I stare at the neon sun as it sinks below the horizon,
the horizon of a world in decline.
The sky flashes into a brilliant light show.
I wish I could freeze this moment in time.

I cannot decide what it is caused by,
whether it is pollution, chemicals, or global warming.
Our world is in a spiral that no one can halt.
We may as well enjoy the show.

Reviews

[Drew Wade]

this is a great poem! is this based on something real? I like how it's cynical at the end, but you still find it beautiful, even if it's nasty. the only thing I would change, and believe me, if you don't want to, it'll still be good, is "acid sun".. Only because you use the phrase 'acid sunset' earlier.

I love this poem. oh wait, i already said that. good job.

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

Nice job!
The only thing I would add to the previous comments is maybe to make the lines a bit shorter by separating the sentences into few additional lines, but then again you have it nice structured.
I only felt that it ended a bit suddenly, maybe you could expand the poem as to add more to the "We may as well enjoy the show."
You could write a completely new poem on that topic :D You really choose a wide topics :D

[Amelia Lawrence]

I liked this poem as well. I have found myself thinking the same things sometimes, watching the sun set across objects. Very good descriptions. The only thing I would change might be a few grammatical errors, but then again, with poetry, I believe you can throw grammar out the window.

It's almost a critique on the way our world is right now, the line on global warming and pollution paints a realistic picture, I could almost see what you are seeing.

Good job! I really enjoyed it