It started with a tear

It started with a tear I didn’t dare to cry

The tears begin to rain

And slowly I drowned inside

I walked around for days feeling only half alive

I smiled at my friends, making them believe a lie

A lie I hoped, they’d relies was just a lie

I was ashamed of my pain, so scared at the time

I didn’t know what to feel, I just wanted to feel alive

So I cut at my arm thinking it was alright

It reassured me that I was still alive

So alive I am now, because I stopped it all somehow

With some help from a friend, who I’ll love till the end

 

Reviews

[Surrealstorm]

I think this is a very good poem. The feelings are real and deep that catch the readers attention. Its rare that a writer can make the reader feel what they are feeling. There was one spelling mistake, In line six realize is spelled "relies" but other than that it is a well written poem. Great write!

[Piikapoka]

Sorry if you guys are misunderstood. This is not about me, this is completely made up. But yes there are people out there like that...Thank you all for your reviews.

[Belthizor]

A very well written poem, the rhythm is consistent and easy to read, the imagary is clear and the tone is easily relatable. Having got Depression, I feel this poem reaches out to me and is a topic with which I can easily identify. Good Job

[swiminmagic]

your poem is much deep and very throughout for the rest, i do think that you may have rushed towards the end i sord of have a feel for that, but other than that... great poem!

[Seraph Trend]

Your poetry holds no shame in telling your feelings. That is how it should always be.
I love this one as well! Again, careful with your spelling, reread your work and brush up these small details.

[Muhammad]

This is a nice poem, really deep and moving. It reminds me of a place I used to be. Although, I hope in the future you can resort to other ways to realize you're alive.

[KatieDaray]

Thats what I felt about a month ago, Very nice poem I love it!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

A saddened piece that found hope and a reason to live. Well done.